My Enamored Treasure

For the group 'Creative Poetry'.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Palaces on clouds

And hidden trenches

Immersed in the glittering abyss

Of passion and acceptance

We have made our own refuge

To hide away from the contortions and frowns

Staining the face of reality

 

I do not need my eyes

For the despair that grew inside me

Now reduced to a speck

Which you blow away

Kiss off my self

Brush it with your lingering touch

The nimbus shines through my closed lids

And I see no wrong in idolizing you

 

As desires erupt

We pluck off the petals

From each other

Feigning competence

Hiding our rosy blushes

Where the coloured droplets of fantasy

Mingle with the transparent reality

Transforming it into desired dreams of past

 

As the inhibitions melt away

With our knowing smiles

Spiraling out of control

Breaking the bounds of ecstasy

You have been and will always be

My enamored treasure

Author's Note

I think its one of my most sensual works. Honest opinions please. I'm starting to open up to criticism. :P

Reviews

[Dahlia Phoenix]

All I can say is that this poem is written so beautifully it touches the reader's heart. I would say so. Completely unique from its own view.

"Hiding our rosy blushes
Where the coloured droplets of fantasy
Mingle with the transparent reality
Transforming it into desired dreams of past"

Passion always seems to awaken in such ways.

[Amila Jay]

Wow, this is really nice:)

[Silent Lover]

This is brilliant! Your words flow smoothly and the emotion tickles the senses. I did not want to stop reading.

[paradise]

Wow this one is also really good I loved how you referred to "we pluck off the petals" It is really creative and unique

[Raven Starhawk]

So refreshing and yet holds something much stronger that seems to fail my fingers as my minds processes its splendor.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Beautifully written. Superb write!

[Sakib]

Great use of words. Well crafted poem. I liked it. :)

[joshua deathdealer]

"And I see no wrong in idolizing you" ha I love that line. This is a great write and I like the font. Well done.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Exceptional poem.... sooo poetic, I love it!!!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Honestly, every time you write one of these for "Creative Poetry Group" you have me jealous in admiration for your talent the way you write these poems. As always, beautifully penned. I loved this.