Transparent Existence

For the group 'Creative Poetry'.

The idea of a transparent existence

Haunts me

 

Knowing and fearing

The deception that lurks

Beneath the shadows of the surrounding faces

With opaque lives and darkened minds

Their sinister smiles

Indicating the gloom that lies ahead

Or maybe it is sympathy, misinterpreted

That I will share their fate

Rotten repugnant thoughts

Infecting the mind

Like maggots infect a corpse

 

Transparent

No robes of pretensions and lies

Like clear markings on the wall

About the past

The present

And the future

My mind, once an abode

Of the dreams and imagination

Of every colour imagined and seen

Not yet bruised by a reality check

Which brought with itself

The ghastly nightmares of future

And filled my present with ominous threats

Perhaps my life was too easy to decipher

Living every predictable second

Living a life with strings in some else’s hands

 

Would you not rather be isolated and safe

Than be social and insecure?

Would you not dare to make your own mistakes

Than repeat the old ones?

Would you not dare to close your mind

Fearing a theft of your secrets?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The idea of a transparent existence

Haunts me still

For I know not what is to come

But the way they smirk and glare at me

Maybe they do

Author's Note

And...?

Reviews

[realmwriter]

No One knows what is come. No matter how well we plan our lives, sometimes things just don't go as planned. Yet looking into such a bleak future as a transparent exsistance is indeed a haunting thought. Sometimes we put it all under a cloak and hope no one sees but in the end we all know that it is on display for the world to see no matter how much we try to hide it.
If one does not one to see right through one then one ought to keep ones thoughts and feelings in ones mind, because as yet, that is the only place they are still safe.

[AK]

Brilliant poem, stunning emotions! Keep writing!

[Becky C Strukamp]

This is outstanding! This one hit home as I do isolate myself ...standing guard of my emotions and heart. I loved this.

[Elaenor Aisling]

Totally connect with this. Honestly, I would rather be isolated and secure, than social and insecure. Though we are all a little insecure, it is better to be sure of who one is rather than sure of who 'they' think you are and lie.

[Leslie Philibert]

Really enjoyed the way you work very well on the main thesis, a brave attack upon hypocrisy and falsehood, well written mature poetry.

[shultzfeather]

Introspective upset with self and the herd. I think you strike a universal chord with the concern-to some degree, eh?

[exotic flotsam]

Maybe you do. I like this, including its dark cloak under which we all hide, sometimes. Should we know how the game evolves and resolves, then there is no game. Like poetry, rules make the writing challenging, yet potent. Well done. The hint of venturing from under the cloak lends light upon the dark. Cool.

[Mockingbird]

great commentary on the world we live in. others' cruelty or baseness pervading our lives. the question of having the courage of your convictions and being true to yourself. great poem.

[Autumn]

A very pensive poem, leaving us to wonder for a while.. outstanding.

[Vinyl Affair]

The font I could live without, the creepy picture I could live without however, this was an impressive poem. It was truthful and impressive, well done and thoughtful.