Separation

A parting gift for my significant other. Revised version.

I have faith in you

But not in the time

That is capable of crumbling mountains to dust

Can our love withstand this strong tide of faith?

 

I have you etched in my heart

But now that you are continents apart

To not hear the voice of my personal angel everyday

Smiling and yet, fearful of the things to come

Scared at the very thought of being alone

When you have shared my days for many years now

Can our love withstand the distance?

 

I haven’t been too perfect or pretty

But you made me feel far better than that

Could you actually peep inside the thick crust of my concrete disguise?

Could you actually make out the outlines of my real self

Long forgotten by me

And love me, for the same

For the very same

To not snatch that feeling of being loved and needed

Feeling frightened for my fragile heart

Can I withstand the separation?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

You have touched my hand and my soul many a time

Filled the moment with the feel of eternity

By looking in my eyes

Pulled me through the toughest battles of life

Reminding me of my own strengths

And at times, weaknesses

Being my confidant, companion, care - taker

My friend, my lover, my every thing

I have faith in you

I have hope for me

Through the clouds of my insecurities

Your presence will shine again

It will be difficult without you

But, I know, the next time I see you

You will see the same girl

I will see the same guy

And the years that separated us will fade

Oh yes, they won’t exist anymore

For the feel of that sheer happiness

When I see you again

I will have to carry on

And I believe, I can

Author's Note

My boyfriend leaves for UK tomorrow and I thought I should write him a parting gift. I have a feeling that the poem is over-whelmingly about myself. I should've tried to incorporate the thoughts of both equally. Ah, well. :)

Reviews

[Don Shaw]

A great poem of the heart. I feel the way you wrote mostly about your view point is good because it came from your heart and your thoughts not his. The lines i have faith in you and hope for me is really what love is all about and penned very well in the write. Great job!

[Just Cat]

Aww this so sweet. I can relate to this to an extent.
(My bf went off to university and I didn't see him for weeks at a time. Not exactly the same circumstances as yours, but its separation all the same)
A great heart-felt poem. Nice work! :)

[Hotwater]

This is the second poem I've read so far and I've not been disappointed at all, two top class writes, you've put this across very well, not overwhelming about yourself at all, we want your words.
Funny, after reading where your boyfriend is heading my first thoughts were... pack your wellies! I see Yas has mentioned the weather too! Hope he enjoys his stay, tell him watch it when he crosses the road... we drive on the proper side! lol
*bird*

[MS. BABy]

This is so beautiful, and no i feel the piece is excellent as it is you are writing about your feelings...the writes never lie. very very sentimental piece.

[Ruth]

Oh love..this is so moving...seperation cuts the heart strings like no other pain! I empathise!
We go on because we have no choice but to go on!
A beautiful poem...emotive and touching
xx

[unknown]

Love can do more than you can imagine. Love can stand the distance. Love can stand the time. Love is here even when we can't see it. This is good as your expressions are honest to yourself on your feelings about him leaving. It is okay if this is more about you. :)

[She Whispered]

"I have you etched in my heart
But you are continents apart"

I think this poem was true, straight from your heart, and no matter how much of you it holds, it will never be a negative thing.

This was very raw and emotional, revealing sides of yourself to him that you maybe never had before, or maybe only emotions he'd only ever glimpsed.

I hope your relationship grows by him being away, for the better and the stronger.

Great write!

[Raven Starhawk]

A parade of beauty within every line. I like how you manifested emotion in each one or at that was how I read this poem. You have a wonderful heart of gold.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

He'll love it in the UK...you know the weather, the ????? etc...jokes aside... I think you have captured that feeling of a loved one going away with such care and warmth he'll love this poem and keep it as a treasure along with all the memories, excellent write :)

[Becky C Strukamp]

A wonderful parting gift. One that can be carried to where ever that person roams. Something etched into memory to hold near and dear till next you meet again. Very nice.

[Dayran]

Proves that the web cam chats, cell phones and e-mails are no substitute for the element of being physically together.