Separation

A parting gift for my significant other. Revised version.

I have faith in you

But not in the time

That is capable of crumbling mountains to dust

Can our love withstand this strong tide of faith?

 

I have you etched in my heart

But now that you are continents apart

To not hear the voice of my personal angel everyday

Smiling and yet, fearful of the things to come

Scared at the very thought of being alone

When you have shared my days for many years now

Can our love withstand the distance?

 

I haven’t been too perfect or pretty

But you made me feel far better than that

Could you actually peep inside the thick crust of my concrete disguise?

Could you actually make out the outlines of my real self

Long forgotten by me

And love me, for the same

For the very same

To not snatch that feeling of being loved and needed

Feeling frightened for my fragile heart

Can I withstand the separation?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

You have touched my hand and my soul many a time

Filled the moment with the feel of eternity

By looking in my eyes

Pulled me through the toughest battles of life

Reminding me of my own strengths

And at times, weaknesses

Being my confidant, companion, care - taker

My friend, my lover, my every thing

I have faith in you

I have hope for me

Through the clouds of my insecurities

Your presence will shine again

It will be difficult without you

But, I know, the next time I see you

You will see the same girl

I will see the same guy

And the years that separated us will fade

Oh yes, they won’t exist anymore

For the feel of that sheer happiness

When I see you again

I will have to carry on

And I believe, I can

Author's Note

My boyfriend leaves for UK tomorrow and I thought I should write him a parting gift. I have a feeling that the poem is over-whelmingly about myself. I should've tried to incorporate the thoughts of both equally. Ah, well. :)

Reviews

[Don Shaw]

A great poem of the heart. I feel the way you wrote mostly about your view point is good because it came from your heart and your thoughts not his. The lines i have faith in you and hope for me is really what love is all about and penned very well in the write. Great job!

[Max]

A lot of sentiment in this poem, straight from the heart.
That always makes a poem seem authentic :)

I really felt what you were feeling,
so great job!

[Elizabeth Hayes]

There is no better gift, than a gift from the heart.
This poem touched my heart, to the very core of my being.
It is a great poem and exemplifies what true love is all about.
Great job.

[Groovy]

Amazing write

[Chris Taylor]

I love the poem exactly as it is. I got an overwhelming senses of pensive anticipation of what is to come and the fear of changes outside the comfort zone. A fantastic poem with a heart-wrenching cry out.

Good Work.

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I think your thoughts are a great indication of your relationship and say a lot about your boyfriend. Even if you didn't incorporate his thoughts, there is still plenty of him in the poem. This seems like a very personal poem, but it also makes sense from an outsider's perspective.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is emotional. It is hard when there is going to continents between. Holding a relationship together with that kind of distance is a struggle. I think this is a good departing gift. Life changes and so do people. I wish you the best. I know you are going to miss him dearly.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Feelings written straight from your heart, excellent read!

[Dark Beauty]

Wonderful poem filled with captivating emotions on speration,great write!!

[Silent Lover]

Ohh how I can relate to these words and emotions. Many can, and that is what makes a good poem - Human emotion. What makes a great poem, is Divine Emotion. The pursuit of enlightened and higher thinking. Love is the most powerful force on earth. Few have loved deeply enough to harness it. Thank you for writing and sharing the vulnerability of your reality with others - a mark of courage, self esteem, and above all, hope.