The loss of my heart

Heart-breaks are never to easy to deal with.

The shattered world we created together

You promised your presence in every weather

Hot or cold, wet or dry

Be there to hold me when I cry

 

What happens when all your precious dreams

Fall one by one to your piercing screams

Yet, the one who pushed you away

Has moved on to a better day

What happens when silence slices your heart

Its bleeds and bleeds and is torn apart

You are numb to the pain and to their eye

They don’t hear you sob or see you sigh

The time you thought once standing still

Has fallen from your hands at its own will

Leaving behind the painful memories

The unforgettable elegance and chivalry

The warmth that used to fill your being

The sparkle in your eyes, unseen

 

Where is the love?

Where is the peace?

Where have you gone

With our precious memories

Left me behind to fend for myself

You’ve gone and left me without help

 

Now let me be in my shrunken world

Which might collapse one day on its own

And I promise to go down with it

Because, believe it or not

My heart, once stolen

Was never returned

Author's Note

I think its need to be tightened a bit. Not one of my best works, but I like the last 3 lines. :)

Reviews

[Helen]

and that is the thing about promises... they can be broken... sad but true

What happens when all your precious dreams
Fall one by one to your piercing screams
Yet, the one who pushed you away
Has moved on to a better day

It's hard to stand by and watch the one we love totally love another only to fall apart and we have to pick up the pieces while gathering our own broken promises...

I don't think this needs to be tightened, I like it how it is... If you decide to tighten, don't strangle it :-)

This is a favorite for me...

[November Gold]

brought a tear to my eye. Been there and it hurts when promises are broken when we have entrusted our hearts to someone. Great work, I wouldnt change a thing.

[ImagineItAll]

You so easily conveyed the emotions of pain and sadness and strength. Well done, I don't think you need to make many changes, if at all!

[A Risen Heroine.]

Iove this piece..
It made me cry..

~A Fallen Heroine~

[stars are far]

nice work
i loved this so much
and this lines are the best

"Where is the love?
Where is the peace?
Where have you gone
With our precious memories
Left me behind to fend for myself
You’ve gone and left me without help"

nice work