Dream-land

A weird, funny, entangled write.

Come with me, take my hand

Meet me in my own dream-land

Lets walk on grass that never dries

Its green, its red, its blue like the skies

Soft to touch, sweet to smell

A sight to make your heart swell

Endless music of the chirping birds

None like the sounds you have heard

A tree with leaves that glow like sun

Our nights glow, days we have none

Take a deep breath and push the ground

Leap into the sky which has no bounds

Fly like a bird, soar like a god

Feel like the creator, the master, the lord

Fall face down on the fluffy clouds

And hear it complain, clear and loud

Laugh and giggle all you might

As I take you forth to another sight

A lake that is so full of life

The stream nearby is his lawful wife

And these two ponds, be his kids

Please don’t ask me how he did it

And there upon that hidden hill

Look closely at the window sill

There resides an old friend of mine

She cooks and cooks all the time

Her beard flows longer than her hair

She has, for a pet, a grizzly bear

A little eccentric but kind at heart

Don’t react if you hear her fart

And down below that cave you see

Lives Dave, our caveman, is he

Disheveled hair and blunt expression

He grunts and slams without intention

Though, so very brave is he

He screams at the sight of a bee

But no one is perfect, in my world

That is the secret it unfurls

Which, my friend, I hope you see

Strengths and flaws make us complete.

Author's Note

I laughed while writing this one. :)

Reviews

[Max]

It's adorable! I wrote a poem like this once :) I don't remember if it's on my page or not. But anyway, I really like the content of this poem, and the style. Great imagery too!

What would massively improve this already good poem is tightening up the meter and the flow. There are a few lines here and there where it gets a little awkward, which distracts from the poem a bit. The rhyme is great, though.

Excellent job :)

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Wow! This is so powerful and amazing,
Love your rhyme scheme and flow.
Amazing write!

[ImagineItAll]

Wow, this took an unexpected turn for me halfway through and at first I was a little unsure about it. But it proved to be so much fun! I like how it turned from serious to a serious-silly. Great job and wonderful style!

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nice.. like it