Unreal experience

For the group "Creative poetry".

He looks at her with a searching glance

Her bewitching smile holds him in a trance

Oblivious to the world, lost in her eyes

Her silver threaded hair and breezy sighs

Realizes with his gaze forever intact

The enthralling sight is a true fact

Lest he should make but one move wrong

The evangelic presence might be gone

A flawless creation of an inventive mind

An epic figure lost in time

Before his earthly self, she stands

Transfixed, yet his heart demands

To hear her sing her favourite song

He knows he has waited too long

Before his voice echoes from his throat

Away she goes, she glides, she floats

 

The hellion enters, shrouded in flames

Iniquitous being with a sinister game

A formless being with burning eyes

Melting balls of burning ice

Leaps at him with outstretched arms

With every intent to cause serious harm

Fearing to be untimely dead

Back to his bed, bathed in sweat.

Author's Note

Mind-boggling reply to an equally mind-blowing challenge. *phew*
Some of the lines are simply...non-sensical. But then, I let them be. :)

Reviews

[Spoken]

i'd say it was a strong reply. well written piece. i enjoyed it

[Sparrow]

Beautiful job painting the images

[kurrupted]

the theme twists out of the piece,
the passion oozes out of the lines,
the reader gets immersed in the tale,
the fonts made it beautiful,
non-sensical? noooo! much-sensical

[LetMeLaughLetMeSing]

:O Wow. This is gorgeous. :D

[Mika Haruna]

This is a very well written poem, deserving of praise! very well written, a flawless poem if you ask me:)

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a twisted tale and the you wrote with passion and detail in this piece. The font style adds to the creativity of this piece. This reminds me of an old world style almost.

[Max]

So, it was a nightmare of some sort? Hmm...

Still, great imagery and flawless rhyme! Great flow. I enjoyed reading this :)

[Myenigma]

this was awesome to read

[TJ]

great...nothing else to say about this one really
flowed wonderfully