One moment of freedom

First hand experience in second hand freedom.

If I were to die tomorrow…

 

I would walk down the busy street

In my favorite child-like fashion

Not strut but skip

Not bend but flip

I’d walk like I’ve never walked down the busy street

 

I would stare each stranger in the eye

With a bright smile on my face

I won’t care if they think me daft

For eye contact is such a craft

I’ll gladly hug them and walk my way

 

You’d see me skipping like a little girl

Muddy slippers and a flowy frock

My hair at the mercy of the wind

Oh so gentle

Oh so ticklish

You’ll hear me giggle

With or without a reason

Whirl around on the stage

Dance without knowing the steps

Feel the freedom gushing through my being

You will see me

Finding the oddest sight ever

But then, you will truly enjoy

When you live that sensation through me

First hand experience at second hand freedom

And trust me,

You will tap your fingers to my silent beat

Soon enough, my friend.

Soon enough.

 

When I will be gone

This memory of a day will stay

In millions of unknown hearts

I would sail through the dewy clouds

Knowing and content

In leaving behind a mark

Be it a day

Be it a whole life.

 

A moment of utter freedom

Is all it takes

To leave behind the unwritten message

“I was here.”

Author's Note

Another breach into a world of new topics. The line I have put up in the description is something that struck me while (yes, it true), playing grand theft auto: liberty city. The pre-recorded radio-jockey said the lines "..first hand experience in second hand love..". I loved this line. (can you love a line?)
So anyway, how was the poem? :)

Reviews

[emmajoy]

You're a girl after my own heart! What a lovely, free, adventurous, happy heart you have, and your words paint such a wonderful, wonderful picture. Through you i feel the smile that dances with true contentment .. 'A moment of utter freedom ~ Is all it takes ~ To leave behind the unwritten message ~ “I was here"

[Muse]

To skip in pure contentment. And to dare a smile in the face of a stranger. Your word play and font choice also helped make this an enjoyable read. Too many writers on here forget to dress it up for the reader. What a light-hearted read! Thank you!

[Linear]

The poem flowed and was in itself a free spirit of the most enjoyable kind, and yes you can fall in love with a line :0)

[KAREN]

Beautiful!!!! I love the flow and the carefree feeling the poem gives when read. Leaving your mark in the hearts of many is a beautiful picture.

[Hotwater]

What a super poem, very well written, just loved the content... brill! Top draw.
*bird*

[.]

thats an incredible line..first hand experience in second hand freedom..didn't quite understand until I read your poem..personally given the loss of people I have seen around me recently (taken long before their 'time') I believe that we should try and live this everyday, because do you ever know when you last will be? We take for granted the life we have and always think tomorrow, tomorrow but maybe tomorrow never comes..this is a make it today poem..loved it!

[arbitrary jane]

i will absolutely skip beside you down the street... daft as all get-out, and free as nobody's business.
we were here.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

I felt the brust of freedom as I read and yes I loved the line second hand freedom, Great poem!

[Sam Severn]

This is one of my favorite poems on the entire Writers Cafe site!!!!!!!!!!! WOW!!!!!!!!! I cannot express in words how powerfully your thoughts here struck me, your vision of freedom, n' of the freedom to live n' love life to the MAX. Just stunning, n' steller as HELL. ㋡

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend,
You write was beautiful and full of musing energy. My first thought was I strive to live each day to its fullest with a heart full of gratitude. I think if we focus on keeping a good attitude, which we have the choose to do; others will see our utter freedom as we leave behind an unwritten message. This message is it is not important if our glass is half hull or empty, but that we have a glass and a hope that a drop might be placed in it in the days to come.

Blessings, Laughing-Bear

[RAWR!]

gawd i love this