Lone drop of rain

One of my best works, I think.

I am this lone drop of rain

The clouds have gone away, again

The bright sunlight burns my skin

As if happiness is itself a sin

I always wanted to fly free

To try to be the real "me"

Not let the winds blow me dry

I got the will, I got to try

But I am this lone drop of rain

Sailing the desert winds in pain

All alone, none like me in sight

The burning days; the freezing nights

One dune to the next, wandering aimlessly

I have, with myself, my own sympathy

Blanketed by dark, sorrowful stars

With their dead gloom, twinkling they are

I am but this lone drop of rain

On a green leaf, muddy and stained

With the likes of me all around

Majestic scenes, a paradise I found

The peace and joy were, alas, brief

For I was a stain, not a pearl on leaf

I wanted to cry out loud

Why I was still alone in the crowd

I left the forest of smiling drops

My heart broke with tiny pops

Still aimless and wandering, still alone

Searching for a place that could be my home

For now, I was ugly, didn't expect much

Muddied, I was too disgusting to touch

I traveled the world, none I found

Who'd accept me without judging on any ground

Acceptance, you see, is hard to expect

For one, like me, an easy target of neglect

I still wander, a lone drop of rain

Hoping my journey didn't go in vain 

Author's Note

Now this is serious work. I can't alter the position of image somehow so sorry for the wrong placement, lol. But mainly, please tell me about the poem. Constructive criticism welcome.. :)

Reviews

[stars are far]

"I traveled the world, none I found
Who'd accept me without judging on any ground
Acceptance, you see, is hard to expect
For one, like me, an easy target of neglect
I still wander, a lone drop of rain
Hoping my journey didn't go in vain "
i loved those lines a lot
but great work !! :)

[Sam Severn]

Your poem gave me shelter for my own similar feelings n' longings n' thoughts! It's so easy sometimes in this crowded world to feel alone n' lost....Your poem inspired me to keep reaching out, to keep my heart open, no matter how wounded it might get. ㋡

[emmajoy]

The picture is as beautiful as the thoughts behind your words .. you write with a willing pen. Maybe you could avoid rhyming for rhyming's sake, just let the words flow, not battle for specifics. Otherwise, the thought of this lone drop of rain .. you .. travelling on and on to find the perfect home is quite a thought.

[Champagne]

Nicely presented. Earnest and honest, it's easy to see that you wrote this from the heart. It's a bit verbose and might do better with some tightening. Some expressions seem to have been forced in just to complete the rhyme. Also the juxtapositions of verb and noun, e.g., 'none I found' seem somewhat archaic in modern poetry.

You have talent. Keep writing.

[Ruth]

Beautiful piece love! That lone drop of rain though can immerse itself with the ocean....therefore becoming a myriad influences! Stunning poem! xx

[∂αʌ<..]

you
are
magnificent!

[TJ]

this a great Siya. To watch the journey of this raindrop. it desires freedom but with freedom comes lonliness and when he finds company he still feels alone. so afraid of judgment of others. what a great metaphor
good work!

[Mariel]

Your poetry is simply amazing, the words are just so descriptive and the meaning so simple, yet beautiful. You made a tiny, unnoticed thing become huge. It was beautiful, you're a wonderful poet.

[Reborn A Phoenix]

love it

[~Wandering Soul~]

your right - this is serious work.

While reading it I kept thinking how it really belonged in a book!
amazing work, it flowed so perfectly and with such description as you have done, that can be quite a task.

FANTASTIC..this is definately another one for my favourites =]

~Wandering Soul~ xxx