Over the blues

Ah, after reading a lot of love poetry and listening to taylor swift, hehe

I try to come up with my own set of words

My own set of rhymes

A rhythm that's mine

I try to put my feelings into the music of love

I take my time

With a dream so fine

I stumble upon verses that don't fit right

That's what I do

Coz' my mind is on you

Dream during the day and spend sleepless nights

Hoping you feel it too

Yeah, that's true

With a flash of a smile

And a wink of an eye

You melt my heart

As you pass me by

Though I joke, you laugh

Seems like two good friends

But there's more to it

You don't understand

I don't have the guts

To confess it right

Hug my pillow instead

Dreaming of you at night

Rising high

Over the bitter blues

As I think of you...

Author's Note

Love, love, and more love...
(two different writing patterns, liked 'em???)

Reviews

[*Kantola*]

"I don't have the guts
To confess it right
Hug my pillow instead
Dreaming of you at night"
I do this so much... hug my pillow while thinking of that special someone :). I loved this piece! It gave me goosebumps. I love the way you write, Siya! So imaginative and song-like. You'll be a good song writer in the future :)
I LOVED THIS PIECE! Amazingly artistic :) I could almost paint a picture with it!
Write on, Siya, write on :)

[He@ther!]

Aw this is so sweet!!:) The imagery was extremely good and the emotions of the narrator can clearly be felt by the reader.
Great job!!!:) I really enjoyed this

-Heather:)

[chloe cruz]

Wow, I really loved this! Mm, it reminded me of Chris, so much. This was really beautiful, Siya. It was heart-wrenching, feeling your sadness yet you could also feel the emotion, feeling. Pretty poem, Siya.

Chloe. (Sorry for the short review, I'm in class.)