How it would be...

Lovely rhyme.

It'd be so dream-like

If you knew it from the start

It'd always feel right

If we connected our hearts

 

It'd be like heaven

When we embraced

It'd feel like hell

If we had to separate

 

It'd be mermerizing

To stare into your eyes

When talking to you

It'd be impossible to lie

 

It'd be so wonderful

To entwine our hands

It'd be so comforting

You toying with my hair strands

 

It'd be so realistic

To fly into the sky

It'd feel timeless

You holding me when I cry

 

It'd be unwise

To keep aside my pen

And to search for a lover

Inside a true friend...

Author's Note

I better start appreciating my writings....lolz
Frankly, I like the last verse the best..
What about you???

Reviews

[chloe cruz]

Siya! This was amazing! And I'm soooooooooooooooooo happy you're going to appreciate your beautiful work now, because like I've always been saying, it's great. This poem, I swear I've been in this situation so many times... you know? In love. I'm debating about love anymore. Is it as great as I have always thought? Or terrible and something I should avoid? I've come to my answer, mainly from the help of your poem and a long time of thinking consistently.

It is a mixture of both, intertwined as well as they both could be. Bitter sweet. And yet, occasionally you'll find a love that's pure disaster or one that is purely fantastic; perfect in all ways. I really wish I could find that type of love, one that is amazing... that'd be astonishing.

Back to your poem! Sorry, I get off track, hehe... I just thought you might care to know what I've been thinking up lately. You know how I get, always trying to find a answer to another question I've brainstormed up!

"It'd be unwise

To keep aside my pen

And to search for a lover

Inside a true friend..."

Wow, that captured my heart and was a fantastic ending to this poem. Like you, this was my favorite verse. Very beautiful. Again, superb job, Siya! Hope to hear from you later... and by the way, sorry this review has taken so long. I wasn't checking if anyone had requested anything, my bad! Like I said, send me a mail on here or just email me sometime. Miss you tons!

~Chloe

[*Kantola*]

This was wonderful!
I can relate waaaaaaaaay too much. Knowing/loving a person you can't see, feel, or touch...

"It'd be so dream-like
If you knew it from the start
It'd always feel right
If we connected our hearts"

That captured my attention. I thought "OH MY GOSH!!! NO WAY!!! THATS HOW I FEEL!"
The last line was lovely, too. It was a cute way to end a very cute, yet mature, poem. :D
This was an extremely lovely poem, Siya! It flowed nicely, and was one of my favorite themes! [LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVE!!! (you can tell how i feel right now, cant you? You helped me to feel alot happier, Siya!!)]
Thanks again,
EXTREMELY LOVELY POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!