What you do to me...

One of the best love songs I've ever written... YAY!!!

No! Don't do what you always do to me...

 

Let me keep sitting

Sipping my tea

Don't bring me back

To this reality

Though the dreams have collided

With this world, it seems

Don't do what you do

What you always do to me....

 

I gotta stop looking into those eyes

I gotta stop falling for that cute smile

I gotta shake my head and jump out of this dream

Oh! Don't do what you always do to me...

 

Why can't you be

Like the other guys?

Why I freeze for a second

When you flash your smile?

Why does life without you

Feels incomplete

Oh! Please, I beg

Don't do that to me...

 

I gotta step out now into the world

I gotta start walking and not swirl

I gotta be strong, both at heart and knees

Oh! Don't do what you always do to me...

 

The magic you spin

Feels out of the world

Every second of time

Is now a precious pearl

And I'd never know

What's happened to me

When you do, what you do

What you do to me...

 

I gotta keep my senses and stay upright

Oh! Who am I kidding, I wanna hold you tight

I wanna dance and sing, so that the others can see

What wonders you do, when you do that to me

 

Oh! I gotta keep myself together for a while

When you're around, I can't help but smile

All sweet and confusing, my life now seems

Don't ever stop doing what you do to me...

Author's Note

Honestly, I love this piece of mine. I once wrote something such as this but before I could save it, I accidently closed the window *darn!*
But anyway, I hoped you liked it... ^_^

Reviews

[Angela]

I love this piece, Siya...I wouldn't change a thing. It makes me think of the man I secretly love, and the way my mind and stomach get all tied in knots whenever he's around. We are the best of friends and I just wish I could really tell him how I feel. Such beauty and love in your words. Try and find the right background music to go with it. Great Job!!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Sounds like a great song! hah. Loved this piece. Great write.

[chloe cruz]

I gotta keep my senses and stay upright

Oh! Who am I kidding, I wanna hold you tight

I wanna dance and sing, so that the others can see

What wonders you do, when you do that to me

That was so beautiful! Your so talented, I'm jealous. Right now I'm in this confusing relationship with around, five people... and I feel like this around all of them! Its completely terryifying. I wish I could just decide. And I think I have. Thanks for this!

[alternative_be]

If I were a composer, I would like to write music to this text...
This really flows... as a good love song should!
You know, I cannot but love this too!

[Amanda]

a really nice write, Siya. it tugs at the heart and makes you feel what it's like to feel the way you do when 'he flashes his smile'.

Amanda

[CLUTZ]

i don't like it, I LUV IT!!! i know how u feel, i like this guy and everytime i see him i get tongue tied and twisted, and when he smiles i want to run to him and hold him. but i don't. that's the tragedy. very nice.

[Mr. Misanthrope]

If you want me to be completely honest with you, and I think you do, otherwise you wouldn't have bothered signing up on Writerscafe, I'm not a huge fan of song poetry. Mainly because it doesn't flow well when read. Only when sung. Maybe you could try putting a soundtrack for background effect.
But I have to admit, this did actually jolt something out of my system, ony I'm not sure what it is.:P It's a sweet poem. Not the best of lyrics. Truth be told, I found them rather repetitive. But again, I ask you to read this review knowing that it's being typed by someone who dislikes song poetry with a passion, unless quoting certain verses from well-known songs, one's which I can relate too.

Overall, great job! I'm sure that these feelings are conveyed very well when SUNG (I have a very fertile imagination, so in a way, I can picture and hear this being sung in my mind, too my own tune, of course.)

[Heather ♥]

Fantasticz

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

This is a beautiful piece that I can relate to...it reminds me of my friend Doc...but I don't think he knows what he does to me!! ^_^
Great write!!

[Unknown Soldier]

I realy loved it it has a lot of rythm! good job!^_^ I didnt know you wrote songs! and what i do so that it gets saved is i first write it in a notebook or i save it in word which is a program to save things! that way i can save it no matter what!