Friend or Love

Something romantic...lolz

As the tears run down my cheek

You hold me closer

And tighter

The grip becomes stronger

Maybe you sense me falling apart

The voice in my head

Keeps telling me to break away

But your words have quietened it

For good

The way you stroke my hair

My world starts taking shape

And we stand there

For don't know, how long

But it feels good

It feels great

The warmth of your skin

Overcomes the cold that has settled on me

The aura of your affection

Has done wonders

Don't you know??

The world will mock me

For if they come to know

They won't accept

That I'm your friend

But you are my love

It's hard enough for me to figure it out

You look like a friend

But you feel like love

Oh! You've got me confused

That explains the childish smile

Which appears on my face

While crying

As I wonder

Who's holding me

My friend

Or my love...

Author's Note

I kinda like this. Feels sweet, right?

Reviews

[*Kantola*]

i know that feeling too well...
"Is this my lover, or just a friend?"
I can't tell you how many times that thought has gone through my mind. =p
BEAUTIFUL POEM! I enjoyed every sentence, every word! You have a wonderful way of putting together poems :D
"It's hard enough for me to figure it out

You look like a friend

But you feel like love"
Those lines alone have captured me... this is my favorite poem of yours!

[closed]

One word for this beautiful. Well actually two words it's also very sweet. Nice write.

[Miss Habit]

I remember being 16
my poems were similar
love is such a nice thing to write about
it seems to always flow
it has such powerful energy
you did a good job expressing these
passionate feelings
don't ever question the quality of your writing
you are brilliant, please remember the following:
ART is EXPRESSION
EXPRESSION therefore is:
ALWAYS BRILLIANT.

My only critique is you aren't usually allowed to make up your own words
quietened = quieted
I am no spelling expert but it is the only snag that I got caught up on
in the ENTIRE poem other than that is has incredible flow for someone of your age!

And if I may... Some words of wisdom from someone who has lived many loves & heart aches offer some incredible advice or rather suggestion of gained knowledge via life experiences:
It is common & normal to feel strong loving feelings at this point in your maturing life. It is beautiful & much knowledge will come from it. Please, at no point give up a dream, desire, passion, or even so much as a hobby that you enjoy for any 'love'. Love like like everything in life including life its self is fleeting. Nothing is permanent nothing lasts forever. Learn to love what you are, it is difficult because society teaches us to be so self critical we often punish ourselves for not reaching the levels of our own desired perfection. However if you can learn early on to Love what you are if not by any other means than to love what you CREATE so be it. I still struggle with loving myself, but one thing no one, no man, no society can take from me is the FACT that I am a BRILLIANT artist! I do not love everything I write or draw or paint or make, if I did I don't think I would be able to appreciate those really awesome ones that lift, encourage, inspire, and bring joy to OTHER peoples lives.
There is NO Light without Darkness.
You are a brilliant writer, you may not think so, because you are comparing your work to people who have been writing their entire lives, whose lives are two times if not more the amount of experience & pain & joy as that of yourself. Go read other 16 year old writers work, I PROMISE they are not as advanced in expression or poetic flow as yourself.
Once again I feel the need to reiterate YOU ARE A BRILLIANT WRITER. I HOPE TO SEE YOUR WORKS 10 YEARS FROM NOW, so I can have the privilege of saying I reviewed & inspired you in the days before you had learned to love your talent as a writer or even yourself via that talent. What you write is going to be the only thing that can out last you & your child's children.
Please change your quote at the top of your profile.

Bravo marvelous poem!!!!

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

AWWW OMG THIS IS SO BEAUTIFUL & I CAN RELATE TO IT PERFECTLY!!!
I know how this feels & you express it so wonderfuly that it almost brought me to tears!
Great Write!!!

[Ruby Moon]

"The way you stroke my hair
My world starts taking shape"

"The warmth of your skin
Overcomes the cold that has settled on me
The aura of your affection
Has done wonders
Don't you know??"

i love those two parts!!!
sweet but also with all the confusion of not knowing if he is a friend or a love

"Who's holding me
My friend
Or my love..."

there was a few times i felt this...
i think you captured the feeling really well

[tarasov]

it is really sweet. i can relate to that feeling. this poem captures so much emotion and confusion at the same time it was well written and from the heart. i love it.
being stuck in friends mode is hard..i think this is a great way to get out those feelings that your having.
i love reading your poems there always so real and upfront. i can't wait to read more :D

[Every1s_psychotic_vampy..]

Awh that was sweet.
The confusion of love gets everyone some time or another.
=] Good write.

[DeAn]

ahhh the innocence of love. smells divine and a refreshing sight to the eyes. great job here. keep it up.

-DeAn

[He@ther!]

Aw this is sooo cute!!!:) I absolutely L.O.V.E. it!!:) The romantic imagery is breathtaking. This is definatetly the type of piece that I like to read!!:) Wonderful job, this is going in my favs;)

-Heather

[Amanda]

The aura of your affection
Has done wonders
Don't you know??
The world will mock me
For if they come to know
They won't accept
That I'm your friend
But you are my love
It's hard enough for me to figure it out
You look like a friend
But you feel like love

this is the part that did it for me....i know this feeling well, for i am feeling it right now with someone special. the good start to any relationship should start out as frienship...only time will tell if it will become more. love is always the important thing no matter what.

this is a very good write, Siya and you expressed your thoughts quite well.

Always,

Amanda