No More

Suicidal feelings

Let me be...

Let me cry...

Let me wash away all my sorrows tonight

I can't live with them anymore

This torture has become too much to take

This mental pressure in intolerable

I can't live like this...

 

Creeping behind

Scaring me to death everytime I look around

IS my own shadow

It never leaves

Even when I want to be alone

 

But when I want to share my thoughts

Even the shadow betrays my company

And fades away into nothingness

 

I've always tried to do the right

But is it my fault that things always went the opposite way?

 

'Hope' is no more than a word to me now

As I know that things will never improve

Atleast not until you're around

 

You!!

It's because of you that I'm suffering this mental torture

How funny it is

That I inflict it upon myself

So that I can punish myself

But I still don't know what the punishment was for

 

I guess, this life's become far too much complicated

For me to handle

For me to live

AndI've become someone I don't know

With tears streaming down all the time

And nothing making sense anymore

With this feeling of being alone

I can live no more...

no more...

Author's Note

A sad and depressing write....One of my instant poems...I came up with it right now

Reviews

[Dani California]

Siya,
this is heartbreaking.
"You!!" is what hurt the most.
Heartbreak,
an emotion that we all have
or will endure at some point.
Some of us, more than once.
It feels as though it will
obliviate us completely.
But,
as life and love would have it,
time heals. :)
Move past "you!!" to you.
Do not allow your life energy to be stolen
by another.

As I said before, you have a certain gift of pen. :):)
Use it to move over and above this...

Excellent work my friend...! Excellent.

[Ama May Cooper]

in intolerable...consider removing the in
Wow what a breathtaking piece of work
Such a descriptive tale of heartbreaken and disgarded emotions
Fantastically written and worded

[Treasaigh (The Solitar..]

Creeping behind

Scaring me to death everytime I look around

IS my own shadow

It never leaves

Even when I want to be alone



But when I want to share my thoughts

Even the shadow betrays my company

And fades away into nothingness


Those are some mighty profound words sweetpea. This is a great description of the pain in ones soul. Very well written. Truly deep and touching..remarkable insight into such a dark place in life. Excellent write!

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

This is a good piece... I love the emotions you portrey in here... it made me think of someone screaming from the roof top about to take the plundge into the dark night... The flow could be better but all in all I really like this... I know those kind of poems are either good to get out or hard to get out.. or both.... This really is a good one... Good Job!

[DeAn]

sometimes the heart needs to breathe in order to grow and this is how we resusitate it and get it to beat and then breathe. your doing very well boo, mind the simple typo's and it is awesome. great job.

l8r g8r
-Tao

[*Kantola*]

WOW! This was a very powerful poem that just oozed emotion. This emotion dug deep into me, and ... just... WOW! This was a fantastic poem, Siya. For a random poem, it was pretty fantastic. I think i sort of know the situation you're talking about: You want to be alone, you dont want anyone to care for you, you hate everyone, blargh.
Super-Awesome-Tastic poem, Siya!

[Wolfwind Words]

Th'is was well woven with images of suffering and inner torment.
I got the image of someone who was gazing into a reflection and as the words were spoken, it was almost like they were being spoken to the self in the mirror. Not sure why I came up with that. But that's what I saw.

For an instant Poem, this was wonderful! Capturing so much of what people caught in the trials of loneliness and despair must feel.

Great Poem!
Infinity's Shadow

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You have my undivided attention with this Siya. So much is written on this subject, but this has something extra...YOU!!! I really love the treatment you have given this because all your emotions are laid bare for the reader to feel. I applaud you for a brave and bold piece of writing, if this is non-fiction...no one is worth slashing your wrists for...move on honey to bigger and better things.
If it is fiction then you have captured the essence of true despair.
Well Done!!!!
Helen :-)))