School...ugh!

School.A place I hate to go when I have to study; a place I hate to leave when I'm having fun with my friends.

School.A place where book is more important than the student itself.

School. A place which is magical and mysterious.

School. A place that nearly cost us our life.

It's a place where more than one reincarnations of 'Hitler' un-necessarily punish me and my friends and shar a common word to their names -'teacher'.And later, they demand respect for the same...

 

'I was wandering in the darkness of the night, feeling a chill run down my spine every now and then due to the horrifying sounds of the jungle."Don't these idiots know that it's bed-time?", I said out loud.'

I heard a few giggles which died a second later.I continued.

'It was getting harder to carry on as the fog was becoming dense and my vision...'

"ENOUGH!!", my teacher screamed.I looked up to her with terror quite visible in my eyes.

"What did I tell you to do, Siya?", she asked sounding all soft and pathetic.

"Umm...write a story about a brave goat"

"And what have you written?"

"A story about a brave goat.", I replied sounding all innocent.I heard the giggles again.

"Then I must be deaf because I don't remember you mentioning any goat to me."

"Ma'am.You don't understand.That IS a story about a brave goat!"

"Oh! Really?"

"Yes, ma'am.The main character of the story, which is me, is a goat.And needless to say, I'm very brave.I mean, name one goat who wanders alone in the jungle at night.", I couldn't help but smile.

"Siya..."

"Yes ma'am."

"Principal."

"I thought so..."

"WHAT?"

"I'm going ma'am." Saying this I practically ran out of the classroom.

'Man! What was I thinking, behaving like that?', I thought.I made my way to the principal's office very slowly, silently wishing that the bell would ring and I'd run back home.I looked at my wrist watch to check my doubts and....I reached the principle's office just in time. Damn!

 

 

 

Author's Note

Finished.I mean the chapter..Feel free to review!! I hope it's interesting...

Reviews

[jen -- JG]

Your intro to the school is quite good, It lets us get a feel for the type of school, the teachers who use different ways in their attempts to teach and the students who behave as well and rebelliously as younsters do at school.

You showed a side of the writer in your short section ( 'I was wandering in the darkness of the night, feeling a chill run down my spine every now and then due to the horrifying sounds of the jungle."Don't these idiots know that it's bed-time?", I said out loud.'

I heard a few giggles which died a second later.I continued.

'It was getting harder to carry on as the fog was becoming dense and my vision...)

You were so immersed in your story writing that you were reacting to it and "acting it out aloud" not realizing you were still in the class room. You were 'feeling' your story of the brave little goat. Unfortunately, the school room is not the place to do this.

Your description of the teacher is well displayed through the dialogue used and we get a good picture of you also as being the "cheeky, slightly naughty, classroom stirrer who does almost anything to get a laugh"

I also get the feeling that this outward bravado covers something else.

I like the beginning of the 'Brave little goat" story and hope we read more her.

Good work so far.

jen-JG

[Rave]

Hmmm. I'm not quite sure whether I like it or not. I'm not a comedy person. But I'll try. Its best to learn all the strokes of the brush and to meddle with every color. Not just use your favorite stroke and color. Or else you'll wind up with the same picture!

When you say you were a goat did you mean you are a capricorn?
just wondering.

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

This is an interesting intro.... I'm not quite sure if i like it or not.... It was a little hard for me to follow but after rereading it i understood it lol.... I got 4 hours of sleep lol.... It's a cute piece that you've written, with a little more detail it could be really good.... Great job!

[youngwriter222]

This is a very interesting chapter and very very good. What a mean teacher. I love how you start it out and go into detail about what happens. School can be like that and I am glad that I still have my youth but somedays it is so stressful that I wish I didn't. Our youthness goes so fast though.

What a brave little goat.

This is good! I loved the intro. Very nice work!

[Jason Nuciola]

its ok but what dous Hitler have to do with it

[Mysteral - Night Prowle..]

Yes it is interesting, although I find it difficult to relate to your school, being so different to the ones I attended. No thought of being sent to a "Principle"... retribution was dealt by the teacher with a slap across the back of the head, or a heavy object thrown at us.
Anyway, back to the review.
"School. A place which is magical and mysterious. A place that nearly cost us our life." Probably the most intriguing lines that make me want to read more. Nicely placed in the opening paragraph. Be careful about using too many one-word sentences.
I have a few more thoughts, but I'll put them in a PM
I look forward to reading more of this story so hope you will share it here on WC...

[alternative_be]

Very interesting! I count myself lucky because during my schooldays I encountered both Hitler characters and teachers that did not exactly act like teachers ... The latter have taught me more skills in life, because they did not always use books in order to teach us and were young at heart enough to remember that at one point in their life, they were young ... Those were the popular teachers, but not so popular with some of the parents ... Why are the Hitlertypes always more popular with the principals and the parents? Because they are afraid a student would develop her/his own mind...
You obviously have a strong mind, please keep resisting and at the same time have the courage to find the balance so you can obtain your diploma.
I would love to read the story about the goat, it is a nice metaphor! Students often treated as flock animals. You dare to escape the flock.
Oh yes, we did have the Hitler types too. I remember my mathematics teacher who turned purple when I dared ask him what the practical use of an axioma was in daily life... My dad gave him a good talking to during the PTA, because in the end he was the one explaining the practical use of maths in daily life, e.g. mechanics ...

[Natasha Ashway]

Oh yes, it is. I read through the words with a smile on my face. Love it! Can't wait for more.

[Adam Jordan Turner]

I like this. Interesting intro you have going there, i like the layout of that for bringing us into the piece. This piece was definitely a throw back for me, took me way back to like middle school! Very cute piece, I love the youth in it, makes me miss my own. Enjoy those days and don't change for any teachers or principals, you'll be much happier in the end that you were yourself. Good work :-)