It's my heart

Typically, it's about all that we keep inside our hearts.Maybe, you can even relate to some verses...

It's my heart...

It's a place where I hide my secrets

It's a place where I'm true

It's a place where I keep my thoughts

That guide me all the way through

 

It's my heart...

It's a place where my feelings live

Sharing joys and sorrows alike

It's a place where I keep my 'love'

'Love' of each and every type

 

It's my heart...

A cemetry of my shattered dreams

A graveyard of my dead aspirations

A cave full of mysteries

A place lacking inspiration

 

It's my heart...

A place where I take nobody's side

A place people enter, a few

A place where I keep my loved ones

A place I kept for you...

Author's Note

I feel i haven't placed the verses in the correct order.I think there could've been a better place for the third stanza....and have I repeated myself?? (gosh! I hope not!!!)

Reviews

[Emily B]

This is so lovely. . .

[Natasha Ashway]

Nice. I like the stanzas where they are - makes the poem draw to a conclusion.
I particularly love:
It's my heart.../A place where I take nobody's side / A place people enter, a few
Thnaks for sharing! x

[Kara Emily Krantz]

lovely lovely ending. just really makes you ::sigh:: :)

i liked the repetition. it's such a soft, gentle plea....

"A cemetry of my shattered dreams

A graveyard of my dead aspirations"

that verse was sad, but we can definitely relate to it.

hugs

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

I like this.... we all hide things in our heart.... It's really good.... I think that you should leave off "It's a place" in some parts.... but I do like it alot GREAT JOB!!!

[Joseph - Michael]

Don't worry about the stanza being in order and nothing is wrong with the repeating as well. In the world or the poetry; No such thing as perfect grammars, sentences, and so on, as long as they make senses and they're from the hearts of the creators as well.

Anyway, a heart always know what it wants... very nice writing, so it's all good here...

[Nely Amorim]

each person has a different take on your writing & it is all helpful as long as it is taken with a grain of salt :) great work and some good advice below :)

[jen -- JG]

This is quite good the way it is - if you are serious about altering placement of the third verse, my suggestion would be to simply swap with verse two.

You would hide secrets - have a cemetery of shattered dreams then move on to

where you feelings live and end with the verse you have at the end.

My thoughs only. Try typing the verses on separate sheets, cutting them to size and reading them aloud in different orders. As you read them this way, - the voice of the poem will find its own way and be heard.

I like the flow of this one Siya well done.
Jen-JG

[Mysteral - Night Prowle..]

This is great, really terrific. For me the order of the lines is perfect. I see your concern over repetition, but I think it is quite effective. Possibly if you added another verse, it may become tedious, but at the moment stick with it. Well done, be very proud of this work.

[Donald Cole]

I enjoy this thought. I don't know about it being out of order yet what I seem to do is maybe start with the bad (graveyard) and move into the good. I am somewhat negatively oriented and so I kind have to think that way to keep me in the positive. This is excellent for depicting some aspects of the heart and i seem to pack everything in my poems, in my heart. or am i unpacking. this is beautiful. It shows me that you treasure your heart. thats what I like in a human. Very good. Don

[Travis Lawrence]

I like the way it's organized, personally, but that may be because I like poems to take sour turns toward the end. I enjoy how love is in single quotes. It gives it a more mysterious connotation, or something like that. My favorite lines:

"It's a place where I hide my secrets
It's a place where I'm true"

They sort of contradict each other. Anyway, well done!

Have a nice day!