Forgotten Tears

Forgotten Tears

A Poem by Enigma
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How old deep feelings resurface...

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These forgotten tears of mine

They still remain...

In the farthest corner of my heart

Inhabited by my feelings

Which were brutally murdered by me

For unexplainable reasons

Infected by my fears

It is the most forsaken place

Where the tears fight for their existence

And when there's commotion

They cross all boundaries

And reach my eyes

Nothing can stop them now

They'll flow

And I'll let them

Even they have the right to be seen

And they remain

First, the forgotten

And now...

These unnoticed tears of mine

© 2008 Enigma


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Well written indeed, I hope you get to feeling better..



Posted 16 Years Ago


How sad .... beautifully written ...

Posted 16 Years Ago


A deep dark secret place where tears stay hidden - we dare not let them see the light of day.
You murdered your feelings - but the fears and tears remain.

You have have a sense of the dramatic and a feeling for imagery and these are some of the tools for great writing.

Your words took me on a journey that I walked away from years ago.

Keep writing, keep experimenting with different ways to write what you feel.
Try re- writing your rhyming work as free verse, with a different rhyme pattern - no rhyme pattern or a mixture of both.

Don't be afraid to experiment with words.

You have talent keep writing - keep going for it.

Very Well done Siya, will be reading more of your work.

Jen-JG

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this poem, i think it has the descriptive flow that comes only from truly feeling and reading one's own pain or even pleasure.. the descriptive flow makes the tears real to me too.. well done Siya, truly excellent work...:)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Whi were brutally murdered by me" I have no clue what you mean... lol... don't you love typos lol.... (are you meaning Which?)

This is a good poem... I think you could use a little more imagery on what the tears are like... I know they're invisible lol but do you feel them... can you slightly see them in your eyes? you know... stuff like that....

It's a horrible feeling when you forget your emotions.... I know I did that along time ago and it took me 2 years to finally get them back.... I just turned numb inside.... Great poem... full of emotions... You're very talented!

Can't wait to read more!!! :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 6, 2008
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Enigma
Enigma

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