My Dad

This is my first poem about father-daughter relationship (maybe because a few seconds back I was singing this song 'Confessions of a broken heart(Daughter to Father)' sung by Lindsay Lohan.It's about Father-daughter relationship...

 

Going through my life

Full of troubles and tests

I feel so vulnerable

All my thoughts are in a mess

All the roads wind up

They lead to nowhere

No hopes; no aspirations

To guide me ahead

My soul parts away

Shameful on my failures

And all the wounds I once had

Now burn my flesh; even my own tears

I fall down on the ground

No energy left to look up

No people to turn to

No ne to pick me up

At such times, when everything's gone

Sometimes, I still try

I try to search for

My savior; my Dad

Coz' I know that he'll save me

And help me get through

I will always be loved by him

No matter what I say or do

It's hard to deny

That my father loves me

But where is he now

My sufferings, why can't he see?

As I said before

All hope is gone

All I hear is painful cries of mine

There's no melody; no song

Why have you changed Dad?

Or why have I?

I don't want to grow up

Forever, I want to remain your child

If growing up means this awful lot

Well, I've had enough

I want to be innocent

I don't want to be tough

I don't want you to leave

I want you to stay

I want you to protect me

And to keep my troubles at bay

I want to tell you that I love you so much

But I don't know how

Coz' you were with me then

But you aren't with me now...

Author's Note

Are the feelings conveyed in a normal way or do they sound a bit....umm...what's the word...kinda unreal???

Reviews

[Nely Amorim]

sounds ok if a little sporadic.. it went everywhere at once.. then you managed to bring it in again. try reading it to yourself a few times.. see if it still makes clear sense to you and if not make the changes u think it may need like breaks between passages or perhaps you've repeated yourself?... in any case a strong poem.. :)

[Mysteral - Night Prowle..]

I don't think the feelings are at all unreal. I was married to someone who felt exactly the same about a father, so I recognize what you are saying. I guess this is written from your experience, your emotions, thus I find it easy to empathize with you. A very moving poem.

[Kelsmiles]

My understanding of this is that you don't have the same relationship with your Dad that you once did. Am I close?
As we grow older relationships between child and parents change, sometimes it's easier to understand the parent, accept them for the struggles they went through raising us. But it can also be difficult to accept these changes.

[Candle in the wind]

No its not unreal > Only a Dad can be there for you like this and if I ever felt that he was moving away I would crumble and dwindle.He means the world to me and has given me silent unconditional acceptance and love.So this craving is so real.