Wispy

For the group 'Creative Poetry.

Wreaths of silvery smoke
Entwine my shapeless form
Whisking me up
Effortlessly
Have I dissolved into the air?
Have I finally let go
Of my material mess of a life?

Clinking Interlinked curves
Spiralling in a controlled chaos
Rising far beyond,
I know not where
Because my eyes still search for my ground
And panic rests at my feet
Which grapple with airy unease

Suspended sparkles in the dark abyss
They call on me
To stand straight
To breathe
To see and hear and feel and touch
Together
Be awed
Be terrified
But behold what I can see
Something I might not find in the grass and the dirt
That my feet long for
Or is it the cold granite floor
And the cradle of plastic slippers

Frozen still
Battling the curiosity against the fear
Pitting the known against the unknown
Who shall win?

The smoke dissolves
The chains forsaken
The flesh returns and brings with it the boiling blood
And the weight of a thousand more souls
Down, down, down

This is how you take one step forward
And twice as many back

But my feet are ready to walk, still
Maybe, tomorrow, I won't fall back

Author's Note

Prompt: Silver / Wispy (a colour associated with a feeling)

And it's good to be back. :)

Reviews

[rivers]

I found your deep and wide sentiment vastly engaging...our flesh form is a very small part of what actually grounds us, You have reminded this reader that motion is... no matter what the direction is...there are times when we need to go back to go forward, down to go up~ sometimes it's simply gravity...

I love the way you end your thought provoking creativity with hopefulness, Thank you for sharing

"But my feet are ready to walk, still
Maybe, tomorrow, I won't fall back"

[anant mody]

coooreally nic piece.of workk:-):-)

[Ruth]

Potent! Reaches the reader and makes them think, beautifully done! :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Excellent use of the prompt. Beautiful imagery, great flow. I love how this starts off dismal and ends on a positive note. There is so much in life that drags us down, pulls us under, tosses us back a few steps, but you remind us to keep trying to move forward. Well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

"Frozen still
Battling the curiosity against the fear
Pitting the known against the unknown
Who shall win?"
I enjoyed the poem. I had to read a few times. I like how you bring life to your thoughts in the poem. I like the way you led the reader to the hopeful ending. No easy road. Just hope we land on our feet and keep going forward. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Myenigma]

I like the imagery,the wispyn into space, and how the known and unknown would make a good fight :),