"Destroyer Of The World"

This was originaly going to be a old poem but I decided to write something new instead.

I am the one who you would label "Evil" but that just isn't so, however the world needs a Devil to scare the "Light" so I usurped the Devils throne to call it my own and threw this world into chaos all in the name of my selfish, self-righteous vision.

Those who tried to stop me... well suffice it to say they are not breathing this very day, and should they still breathe they are hardly living as it is, no use stopping the calamity so they might as well hold their breath....before I take the rest.

Because you see I lead this world full of human identities such as poverty and greed that the commoners and commonwealth can identify by, one needs the other for otherwise the other would die.

Corruption followed all of those whom wallowed in the light and soon became known to be a blight upon society, as I am the one who is looked at and praised so highly.

This world needed reason so I gave one to be given, I donned the name I had received from my countless enemies the very one's who could not believe the reality in my low morality. 

They call me a "Devil" I say more like a "King" for war had spread across the depths of every plain and in the center was the "Demon" feared by all, the monster hidden in a man's skin.

Who destroyed this "Beautiful" world and caused great amounts of pain to both "Friend" and "Enemy"

Cold to the core of his heart and ever so more merciless from the start, casts away pawns who have overplayed their part.

I am the reason why you turn the eye, I am the reason for why you lie, I am the reason you curse your own name and wish to damn me for all eternity.

I am that monster stuck in your head, I am the nightmare you've continued to have fed, I am the understanding, I am your moral relief.

...Long live the king

I am that "Abomination" who destroyed this world and split it in two and from the ashes created anew.

Empires have fallen under my banner but now that unity has come everyone's fingers say the same story "Point the blame at the Demon!"

Thus here I write my finale before I am no longer of this life, Now here I shall leave my light the fuse to a flame, to carry on through each and every generation to create a better tomorrow with my suffering and sorrow.

Yet I shall not shed any tears, do you know why?

.......Because "Demons" don't cry. 

Author's Note

This was a lot of fun to write for... what did ya think?

Reviews

[Njeri Brooks]

Ooooh. This has a lot of mystery.

Concept #1
I like how you implied that evil is just as vital as good. The concept is something that's kind of new to me as this is the first time I've heard of that.

It took me a good minute to really try to piece together what you were trying to say in this story.

Hopefully, I hit the mark, but if not could you explain it a bit more? (When I read, I like to analyze the writing as well.)

Concept #2
But another concept that I thought was interesting was one that had more so to do with the mc's personal internalization of self hate. Or maybe not so much his internalization of it, but his acceptance of what others have labelled him.

Toward the end, it became more evident that he may have been a scape goat. The names other called him to alleviate their joy did not cease to amaze me.

"They call me...hidden in a man's skin."

This was the line that clued me into the fact that the mc really was just a scape goat. He may have been at the center, but the last time I checked, it takes two to make a war.

Which of my concepts were right?

The instance in the story where the mc switched from first person to second person threw me off a bit. ("Cold to the core...overplayed their part").

Why the switch?

Also, I wanted to know why you chose to have to put quotations around the words you did.

Was it to mock them, or for some other reason?

Writing critics: (don't take it personal)

1) I know you have a certain style, but do you take time to breathe as as you recite your work aloud?
If so, that's is a big sign that your work... may need... COMMAS, which are sometimes committed after many of your subordinate clauses, interrupters, and transitions.

2) I enjoyed the story as this was the first time I really considered the fact that in order to be 'good' people need those who look 'bad'.

However, you have certain lines where it's more like a run-on sentence than anything.

Because this is poetry, some rules don't apply, but it would be nice to know if this is intentional or not.

For example, "this world needed... my low morality" was an instance where it appears to be a run-on. Was it intentional, or am I looking at it wrong?

Overall, this story was very intriguing.

[Sir_Anonymous]

They were both right as those were my intentions for the most part to have the whole fight "fire with fire" idea displayed for this case to be destroying evil with evil.

He brought everyone to believe he was the worse type of man alive and is practically a monster with his cold morally questionable actions.

The second person viewing was essentially his legend or infamy being shared and spun around in more tall tales thus making him seem less human.

The quotations were there to be what the other people thought was going on based on the news they received which was word by the mouth as this is again set in the medieval era.

I felt that I didn't need to have a pause of some sort seeing as how I pictured more of depressing,sad or slow talk while still sounding imposing towards others.

Like a weary king who is tired of acting a part he wishes to not but he does for the very people who slander him as they don't know.

Again when he starts saying all of things he is such as the reasons for why people don't fight corruption or being they're moral relief where he is so evil that the sins other people did would make them still seem like saints in comparison.

Than my favorite part
"Long live the king"

As this is the general sentence that is said before someone commits regicide.

He knows he will die soon thus is why he says that line... But what people don't know he planned for this to happen.

He's pretty much the real hero of the world just a sheep in wolf's clothing.

Now a sacrificial lamb "For the greater good."

[Njeri Brooks]

Thank you for answering all of my questions!

I tend to be too analytical sometimes, but I do like puzzles of the fictional kind.

Speaking of sacrificial lambs, I kinda agree with you. I don't really like the stories where the mc willingly dies just so he/she can be remembered for the future generations.

I'd rather read about an mc who will do anything it takes to stay alive. Even id it means going against what society considers 'right'.

[Njeri Brooks]

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[Sir_Anonymous]

I'm kinda tired... Between messaging you and reviewing other people's creations that I've found or been told to read via read request so I think I'm gonna let my eyes rest awhile...

Looking forward to your review of "Reason to Lie" but I may take awhile to read and respond back.

It's been a pretty busy day with going to the doctor, getting my oil changed, going to the gym, and picking up my sister from school and going grocery shopping.

Not to brag (but totally will) lifted 200 lbs today doing squats... That's fun... My back hurts.

Lovely talking to ya but I'm just slowly but ever so surly falling asleep right now.

Sincerely, The Spectacular Word Slinger and Your Friendly Neighborhood Sir_Anonymous ;-)

[Njeri Brooks]

haha. Man, you sound like my brothers. I hate going to the gym with them because I only run on the treadmill, and they'll end up criticizing me for how I only run. (lol no weights for me thank you).

Well, your review will be up in about 15 more minutes, but I understand. Check it whenever, and get back to me.

P.S. hope you're not on steroids (200lbs seems like a LOT)

[Sir_Anonymous]

Nope I'm all natural... Plus I'm just lean and toned yep just lean and mean.

[Sir_Anonymous]

G'night to you or perhaps good morning to you... Don't know.

[Njeri Brooks]

I live in West Virginia, so yeah, it's only it's almost 11pm. Night. Ttyl for our next writing pow wow.

[Shasha]

It's really fun to write on dark things. I even enjoyed reading it. Being me again, I loved it as you know I love dark and mysterious writings. Thank you for sharing it. Keep sharing writings like this one.

Your friend
Shasha

[Sir_Anonymous]

I've got a whole plethora of poems with a dark tone or "unrefined" humor.

Sincerely,Your Friend Sir_Anonymous

P.s plan on posting a few old one's from my journal's archives before I make something new again so look forward to reading them.

[Shasha]

All right.