"Killer Discovery"

One of my first attempts in writing a creepy killer story/poem.

It's the same dull thing day by day, smile! don't show your true self hide behind your beguile.

Never show your actual feelings, let the false you walk in the light but once it turn to the ominous night let your true self roam freely through out the city and put all of it's "good" residents in a terrible plight.

hide your caliginous crime and like a true genius wash your knife and remember to sharpen it twice!

dawn arrives say G'night and bid adieu to the fake you and let the masquerade continue as you parade around the town.

Say hello to the fine folk, laugh not with but at as they are so clueless to your crude cruelness. 

The very sadistic nature you take undignified pride in, the very scream of terrific terror you take in such delight in causing just drown out the silence with the ever so "soothing" melody to signify another good night of hunting.

This time tonight you feel the twisted need to make your self known so instead of hiding the body; let's place it's disfigured figure on display and leave the soon to be traumatized enlightened and evermore frightened! 

Oh dear now they know a murderer is near ah I can feel their eye's quickly shifting back and forth from ignorant joy to fear and with fear comes suspicion.

"Hello my good neighbor are you the killer?"

friends and family suddenly questioning why one of them always insisted on being on his own or to just leave him/her alone.

For now I will continue to play the role of the beloved "Saint" who in fact is actually tainted with the demented curiosity of pure animosity.

Feel's like days have passed since I last made another vandalized horrifying work of creation truly a sight for sore eyes!

Yet I must hold my bloodlust for the game I shall wait and see them all rip each other apart, then when I seize the time to see their face's caught in-between surprise and undiluted rage!

Oh who the hell am I kidding!?

All of this deranged thinking is making me shriek with joy so many lives to take surely they wont mind if I took a few more!

I can't hold myself back any longer I need to smell the crimson fine textured red!

My repulsive impulses must be fed!

I wish to hear the aria of a young maiden's scream!

... Ah she will do quite nicely, first show your charm fool her with your graceful acting and take her under your wing for a night of drinking she will think.

Then once isolated in the mysterious alley ways make your move, flash the knife see her panic and astonishment intertwined and only then can you allow the melody to begin.

The tempo starts with the carved out eyes, the rhythm kicks with the arms, the beat picks up with the legs no longer in place for a running pace to finally end it with a bang! As the heart is pierced and the intestines hung around her neck like a gory necklace.

Voila Magnific! Another fine piece but look at it it's in pieces!

*Sigh* these fools wont even see me as the culprit unless I spelt it out for them to slowly read with their slow witted minds!

So to quicken the haste I will leave a spurious lie this faithful afternoon they will see the local tailor as the enemy, for tonight pitchforks and daggers met with torchlights will brighten the way to my ever so close unveiling.

Sadly it's still a ways to go, oh what's this I hear someone begging and silence soon met with horrendous slashing and skull gashing?

Now while the "good" people are preoccupied I will take my cue and plant convicting evidence on the town marshal and in doing so the law will soon be overthrown just a prickly thorn no longer stuck in my side.

*Yawn* morning is here well then time to continue my flawless deception just gleam with unfounded passion and win their hearts, while subtly I spread my glorious madness on to them!

Let them all realize little too late that they have also sinned!

Tonight's the night the right time!

Oh I can feel it in my bones, this plague I concocted is about to end and let their foolish epitome of self discovery begin! 

Remember sharpen the knife!

Midnights arrived... but I sit in my chair lying in wait.

Lights approach I have hand on blade! The door collapses and the crazed invade! I charge In with a sinister smile plastered upon my face and shout out the words....

"SURPRISE!"

Author's Note

So what did you think?.... Other than "This guys got problems."

Reviews

[Njeri Brooks]

This piece is actually very interesting. I really like your style of writing, and I also love how you spin it so that the main character is manipulating those around him.

It really reminded me of a TV show called "Dexter". The premise is along the same lines, but I like how you made the Killer more manic.

In addition to that, this is the second work I've read by you. While the concept in this writing is really good, the grammatical lack of punctuation makes it harder for me to follow your stories.

I often find that I must read your writing out aloud to myself in order to really comprehend the meaning. Thus, it deters me from really enjoying the story itself.

P.S. the first story I read was "Phoenix". It was very good, and I could really relate to some of the things in it. :)

[Sir_Anonymous]

Well I used to share my stuff by reading it out loud like in this case I wrote this with the idea that I would do my best Joker impression with a slight sign of mad hatter mixed in the less disturbing bits.

Also my poems are generally stories thus the rhyme can be quite lengthy.... Not exactly a "Rose's are red. Violets are blue...." Kinda poetry.

Sincerely, The Spectacular Word Slinger

[Njeri Brooks]

Hmmm... Your creative process is really intriguing, and I do like how you take the concept of a narrative poem to the next level by writing in longer stanzas. (lol, Not something I'm very good at.)

Because the beginning was so enticing, I actually got caught up in the how relatable you made it seem.

How you set up the beginning also made it seem as if the Killer were actually a hero when you said "Never show...terrible plight."

Overall, it sorta gave me more of the "Joker" vibe more than anything.

Also, I wanted to ask, did you by any chance intend for the "sharpen it [the knife] twice" bit to come off as humorous? ( It could just be my sense of humor lol)

[Sir_Anonymous]

My humor is rather dark so yes I fully intended the knife bit to hold a humorous tone as well as the whole killing sequence such as "The tempo starts--gory necklace."

Oh and the "Look at its in pieces." Bit

Amongst many others... So yeah your humor might match mine lol

Sincerely, The Amazing Stanza Composer

[Sir_Anonymous]

If you liked this type of humor than I guarantee you won't be disappointed while reading "Drugs, the Fuzz & Fun"
I'll leave what's about up to you lol

[Mystery]

OMG! This is beautiful! Like the amount of emotion here is amazing and impressive. I'm also a teen and trying to write just as beautiful as this. I'm starting to look at your poems and I am falling in love with them! The way you write makes me want to aspire to write like you! I'm becoming a huge fan of your writing.

[Sir_Anonymous]

This is a first! To be told that my writing is something someone within my age group aspires to write like! and so happy to see that I have made a friend who loves my writing like you do... If you haven't yet I highly recommend you read "Drugs, The Fuzz & Fun" it's not about killing but a guys trip through the city while high.

[Shasha]

You rock so hard!!! I loved it. Maybe the best I read from you. Your all writings are very nice but according to me this was the one. I think, you know, I love these types of writings - Dark, twist, internal and all like that. Thank you very much for posting and making me read it...

[Sir_Anonymous]

I'm glad it was up to par with my other works and perhaps in this case even better, though I must admit I had quite a lot of fun writing this one.... You know if you haven't already I highly recommend reading "Drugs,The Fuzz & Fun" it's not about a killer but a man's trip through the city while he's high.

Sincerely,Sir_Anonymous

[Shasha]

Yes, I have actually not read it. I will read it...

[Sir_Anonymous]

Seeing as how you've read and commented on a good majority of poems is there anything you'd wish me to read that you have written and posted?

Sincerely,Sir_Anonymous

[Shasha]

I read and review your writings because I really like them a lot. And yes, thank you so much for reviewing my story. I am glad to read it. And I don't think that any writing is left that you have not read. You also reviewed every writing of mine. Thanks for that....