Elements Without Effect

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The thunder crashes all around.

Trees break with a mighty sound;

Landing violently on the ground.

But never denting your lovely crown.

The waves careen to and fro.

Wave after wave in a deadly drove;

Drenching all there is to show.

Yet never dampening your alluring glow.

The wind buffers at every turn.

Stopping beings with discern;

While uprooting all in its scorn.

But for your love I still do yearn.

The fire is roaring with its anger.

Burning all as a deadly painter;

With intensity by a doppelganger.

Yet you are protected from its danger.

The protection hinges on a King;

Who loves the dearest Queen.

Giving breath she has to breath;

And a Knight for her every need.

Though troubles may come our way;

I know our love is here to stay.

In the darkest moments of the day;

Just remember that the price is paid.

Author's Note

Tried something a little new! I am slowly attempting poems with slightly different styles so tell me how to improve! I know this poem is cliche, i know i know, but you cant determine inspiration. So help me improve! :)

Reviews

[Dhaye]

Nice!
I only have a suggestion about the last line which for me should be, if not the best one similar to the title, highly supports the title or your concept. You have described your love protected from any waves, but the last seems contradictory to the purity of your love (since you mentioned the price is paid). Maybe something like "We are each other's cavalier", sounds like you are both protecting your love for each other.
Just an opinion. Hope not to offend you.
Other than that, I like this piece.

[Sir Joseph]

Its all good haha dont worry about offending me ha. it was the meaning behind it that i am going for :)

[Ethale Captor]

I assume this is for her as well? It is a great write. The rhyming of all four lines in each stanza is nice, it gives a stronger power to the emotion of the write.

[Sir Joseph]

Yes it is for her:) and Thank you:)

[Ethale Captor]

No problem.

[quinfinn]

seems no matter what the world throws at you ....you are determined that it will not stain or harm your beloved. that is how it should be. this is a violently tender write, which is a contradiction, but...isn't that what love is after all? very engaging and resonant write. well done!

[Sir Joseph]

Thank you so much for the review! Was unsure really how well I put this piece together.

[marie]

Awwww:) thank you so much my dear sweet knight I absolutely love it!!:) you are amazing!!:) this piece is soo sweet:) just what I needed after today:)

[Sir Joseph]

I had a feeling you would:) And im sooo glad you do:) Thank you!:)

[marie]

Thank you!!:)

[StayAnchored]

Cute! Great job :)

[Sir Joseph]

Thanks! Glad you liked it:)

[beautiful dreamer]

nicely done!

[Sir Joseph]

Thank You!:)

[beautiful dreamer]

welcome!