The Meaningless Fight

You fight and fight

With strength and might.

You fight and fight

With no end in sight.

You run headlong

Into a battle far gone.

Your try to move stone

Yet you just break bones.

Your muscles are tearing

With your heart rearing;

Full of self searing.

Yet you are blind to fearing.

Your foolish rush of thought

Is the pain you brought.

Freedom have you sought

In your own trap are you caught.

You try not to be prideful

Try to live by the Bible

All your faults you are liable

Why can't you be idle

Idle in your stupidity

Idle in your indignity

Stop this monotony

Forget a lobotomy

Use your mind not your might

As you fight this fight

Open your eyes to His sight

So you can walk by the light. 

Author's Note

My own stupid mistakes cause me to beat my self up alot. yes i do forgive myself but decided to write something first

Reviews

[Dhaye]

I admire your faith. Rarely here (the male writers) describes their believe in the Holy One.
Since you are at ease with rhyming, let me suggest one thing about it in this stanza:
"You try not to be prideful
Try to live by the Bible
All your faults you are liable
Why can't you be idle"- - - -The last word is distracting for me. Idle means inactive and lazy. Why not change it with "noble, respectable, or honorable"?
Just a suggestion. Peace be with you, Sir Joseph.

[Sir Joseph]

In all honesty, in reading it myself, i dont like the wording of that stanza because it seems contradictory until the next stanza. idleness in faith is wrong but i was referring to the idleness in rash actions. but thank you soo much for the review :)

[Ethale Captor]

I can understand writing self-directed poetry, as I do so quite often. This is my favorite of your writes thus far.

[Sir Joseph]

Thank you!

[Ethale Captor]

'Twas my pleasure.

[Holly Mason]

what a war and God will help
thank you for sharing

[Sir Joseph]

He helps me with every step! :)

[StayAnchored]

You really do have to rely on God because you can not forgive yourself for your mistakes until you have confessed them to God :)
Great job, my friend!

[Sir Joseph]

You are correct! and thank you very much!

[Brandon S. Whitten]

The war in our head can come to an end if only people realized we cannot live without God. Excellent read and write.

[Sir Joseph]

thank you my friend

[marie]

Joey, your mistakes are something to learn from not best yourself up over, I don't care about your mistakes I care about you

[Sir Joseph]

I know you do, and im thankful for that, but how was the poem?

[marie]

It was well penned and wonderfully versed:)

[Sir Joseph]

Thank You:)

[marie]

No problem:)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

Yes our strength can't carry us through, we need to look to Him for His strength.

the only thing that i would change is "In your own trap [you are] caught" but thats just me.

Good Job

[Sir Joseph]

Thank you for the advice!

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

You're welcome