Forgotten son

This is written about my biological dad

Dont you see who you are?

Not caring about the scars

Of all the children hearts?

You are the painful dark.

I was the first yes i know.

Why wasnt i the last in this show?

You never even got close

Before you left as the wind blows.

Now your family sees the pain

Of what you did for your gain.

They apologize for all the stains

My tears made out of suffering.

They say its sad indeed

That a boy has to bleed

From all this pain and agony.

Wont you change this i plead.

Let me show you what i mean

So watch my life as a testimony.

Wont you hear, wont you see

That im just asking care for me?

Bouncing from job everyday

Just because something isnt your way.

Fury flying from your blind dismay,

Just drop to your knees and pray.

I am not angry i do forgive

You for the life you live.

Drop the life of this rabid

And take the branch of olive.

Author's Note

I decided to try out yet another new writing style so please tell me how i can improve!

Reviews

[iliOZ]

oh my gosh, joseph

i cannot believe my eyes.
you wrote down my exact feelings i live with since childhood.
masterfully described my (our?) plight
my stepfather (rip) made damn sure i will carry a cross for the rest of my life and i think he won.
many times i questioned my worthiness on many level of my life and had to work ten times harder to achieve what i did, but still failed at many...
i will see at the end if it was worth it or not.

ps. i think it is time to ask you to be my friend

[Ethale Captor]

Excellent write. The style is not far from your typical style, which I like. You have a distinct way of writing that is subtle yet strong. Keep up the good work.

[Sir Joseph]

Thank you!:)

[Ethale Captor]

No problem.

[iliOZ]

i love the style
as for me...i am still praying for forgiveness, so i can forgive myself

[Sir Joseph]

I will be praying for you my friend

[iliOZ]

you probably knew it, march 19 is st. joseph's day.
the same day you wrote this piece.
thanks

[Nick.B]

This new writing style is quite interesting, more maturely and very complex...great job

[Sir Joseph]

Thank you soo much! :)

[StayAnchored]

Great job! I am happy you forgave your father, that takes so much faith and so much strength to forgive someone like Christ forgave us :)

[Sir Joseph]

It was very hard but it was very much worth it!! :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like it, I can feel the emotion behind the words. I'm glad to hear you have forgiven him, hope he sees what he has done wrong and turn down the right path.

Good Job

[Sir Joseph]

Thank you! and yes, i have to just keep praying and live my life as the example hoping he will see

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

yep thats the best way of doing it ^^

[Sir Joseph]

The only right way really! :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

well true xD

[Sir Joseph]

Yep Yep Yeppers! :P

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

o: thats what i say >.> stealing me words eh? lol

[Sir Joseph]

Yes, yes i am! mwahahaha

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

:p

[Sir Joseph]

I win! lol

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

D: nuuuuuuuuu

[Sir Joseph]

XD LOL mwahahaha

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

lol silly :p

[Sir Joseph]

Yes i be :P

[marie]

this is beautiful Joey... nearly brought tears to my eyes, i am so sorry you had to live through this, but i am going to look on the bright side of things and say because of it your walk with God is stronger, and you have an example of what not to be.

[Sir Joseph]

Thank you marie!:) it means alot and yes you are correct!:)

[marie]

its no problem joey:)

[Sir Joseph]

But it still is sweet:)

[marie]

Aww:)