"Short"

Running out of time

I cant get that clock to stop ticking in my head

to short are the days that seem to bring me happiness

And to long have i waited for love

"there is love burning to find you" written deep in my flesh

but do i really believe it?

I'm short on time, So

Bye

Reviews

I like the transition of thought in the poem. The thought process is long at first, but then it winds down, like a clock. Not sure if you intended it that way...I usually tend to over-think things a lot.

and I can't get over the last 2 lines, heh. Very witty and abrupt.

[alesuriko]

First off... criticism... You need to add an apostrophe in "cant," in the third line it should be "too short" instead of "to short," and there are two "i"'s that need to be capitalized. Other than that. This is a decent poem. Compact and short but meaningful. I really liked the blunt ending as well. Very nicely put.