after a broken heart

Based on a male character unwilling to love again and a female character who tries her all to make him feel love but fails

He hasn't been in a relationship for years now. So much that he's grown to hate girls that start expressing their feelings.

Soon after his broken heart, he met her, she fell instantly but, he only felt things
to uncover and get her willing.

For a long time he was told that he's so cold, that he doesn't even realize the hearts that he is stealing,

But he has no interest, he know's they tend to lose the keys to his building.
So he was not blind to it, its his heart he's interested in keeping...

Sleepless nights she sends texts 'bout how she wants to keep it too, he doesn't answer texts, unless they're talking sex.

Something about a girl all over his pecs.
She Doesn't bother smiling, he only sees her face when he is wearing specs.

He changed, he was not always like this but now, they converse about how he is a cold case
How he comes , but never gets close then he needs space
How the only knot he thinks of tying is with a shoe lace
But she stays because she hopes that life is a file filled with different pockets

With no plans to change, she soon would understand that you get shocked when you put your fingers in the socket.

Author's Note

Appreciate constructive criticism, please let me know what you think...

Reviews

[Daniela Diaz]

This definitely captured the struggle of many relationship today.... people stay in relationships that do not seem to be going the right way because they hope for a better out come in the long run.. they keep telling themselves that things will get better but not realizing that in the end everything will back fire and they will end up hurt. I do agree with the comment below, it seemed more like a short story then a poem but it definitely draws you in!!!! This is the type of writing that i want to transition too, from short poems to short stories... I love it!!! looking forward to reading more of your writings! :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

This was great! However, even though I love writing without structure, i.e. words do not have to rhyme, but when you do decide to make things rhyme, it can sound forced if the rhyming is not consistent.

This sounded more like a short story than a poem, and to be quite honest, I think it has more potential to be a short story......the interest of the reader is grabbed from the start, wondering whether she will be able to revive his frozen heart......how about thinking of some sort of twist - something she can try, which shocks him out of his comfort zone? I do not think he does not love her.....he just believes he does not......due to past hurts he thinks - even subconsciously - that he should be cold - so if she can break through that, mutual love could surely be an option?