Battlefield

I'll be using this smaller poem as a piece or chorus of an epic soon. Look out for that!

Battlefield

Ebbing or changing, strangled on hair strings

Daylight is cut down by sword

Dreaming but ageing, heaven or hades

Walking the path through the snow

Mending but shaking, rending awakened

Nightshade I fade to the cold

Biting and aching, stalking and chasing

Giving a dream through my soul

Growing and ending, bearing resemblance

Sending this war left unknown

Sleeping is endless, stuck in a cemetery

Make my way home down the road

Author's Note

I very seldom reply to reviews, but I promise I read EVERY single one. I look forward to my next review, because it helps me learn. Even if it's just one word, I promise, I will be ecstatic to have the chance to hear what you have to say. Whenever you write something about my poems, or the themes of my poems, or criticize me it is not in vain. I will listen, learn and be thankful.

Reviews

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I like the repeated use of -ing , it gives a good flow. Writing compact poems are difficult for both reading and writing because the writer has to relate words more strongly and cleverly and the reader has to read in between lines where each word consists of dual meaning.
For what you're saying weird about "Aging and Ageing, Aging is American english and Ageing is British english however both the words can be used for the same meaning like Airplane and Aeroplane mean same.
For the poem, this one has it's own personality, a unique personal quality. There are indirect lines but that's what a poem is known for. So overall it's a very good poem since I haven't read anything like this before written by you. Well done!

Good Luck J!

[R.J Calzonetti (SinisterPotatoe)]

Thank you, I really enjoyed writing this poem. I'm glad that you can feel the personality of it.

[John the Baptist]

This work may be describing a literal war, but somehow I think the conflict is actually an inner one. It could be some kind of religious crisis; the accompanying illustration appears to contain both demonic and Christian imagery. We have no doubt, however, that the speaker is engaged in some type of struggle.

PS: do a spell check on line 3, word 3.

[R.J Calzonetti (SinisterPotatoe)]

I won’t say exactly what kind of struggle, but that’s up to the readers to decide. You’re right about that word, I actually put in the word ‘aging’ but the spelling software I have said it was ‘ageing’. I looked it up and found that both spellings are used, which is weird. Don’t know why.