Abyssal

A longer rewrite of my poem Dark Abyss. A more finished, more full, version.

Blazing across the vibrant stars, silent, violently shaking, strong, pushing on, breaking through life’s iron bars with lilac fire shattering shards with my words harder than rock, shooting farther than a comet, vomiting sonnets, like poetry from a faucet

Beating through the cloudy skies, riding fine, flying high, driving by your rowdy lies, taking your a*s for ride, never defeated, never tried, buckle up and keep yourself seated, still alive?Elitists cannot pass me by, spitting hot words that'll leave you fried

Smashing past your every move, never defied, while your faltering, altering and halting the haunting abuse you choose, leaving you salty, I never lose

Forgotten are the times when there were those that I have had to overthrow, seeing where the corpses go, and where the crimson flowers grow, where blood has flowed, I won’t be another, brother, I’m not that slow, I’ll show you that I’m full of hope, through any struggle I can cope

In the empty darkness that choose my soul, an empty promise, that’s how it goes, never garnished, never honed, never wanted, never known

Roses fragrant, now wilting stagnant, we were building fragments, I’m now a vagrant

We used to be part of a whole, now the pieces are no more, lying shaken on the floor, broken bodies, bloodied gore

Truly spent, duly sent, time to repent, where the scent of greener grass under this world of broken glass and tombstones clash as crumbling ash fills the air, the dead are silent never care, as my body slowly begins to crash, can’t last forever, it’s only fair, should I really even care, my feelings clash, as my mind flashbacks to the past

I remember then, a time that when I had to bend, to daftly defend the ones I thought to call my friends

Sends me back, I chuckle, laugh, remember when I thought I knew the facts, I no longer have freedom, my life has cracked, I lost my humanity, it’s what I lack

Remember dismembered rendered rending pieces of my honest mind, sending me tending to my weakness to keep in line, too weak to fight the past years fondest longest crime, taking away my life my last line’s rhyme

Beaten broken token dumb, spoken bleeding numb wide-eyed with bleakness treating wounds that would not seal, run away from feelings never seen as real, cuts on my body that never fully healed

Left behind to find the breadcrumbs

Living dead to unwind my mind my unkempt lead lunges

Weighing me down, drowning now in the tears of the dead, the anger that my life had fed, the words the guilty party said, heart, pounding sounding loud, seeing red, frightened enlightened wow, well endowed with hate they said, I found now I’m fateless, beheaded, empty, spacious, no longer human, no longer sacred

Weightless, hatred boiling the hot red water, sinking down to the bottom to be forgotten, as I’m treated enslaved, baited enraged, no longer stronger, what goal I sought it doesn’t matter because I’m gone, it never mattered who was right or wrong

Why do the b******s even bother, just another rotter slaughtered, clotterised by fire, a cold demise retired, so despised inside their eyes, like worms hungry, feasting, fast to claim the perished prize

Told me it was time to die, say it was suicide, confided the law cannot define why signed notes can make a joke out of those who walk this earth, the children who have just been birthed, I can hear the choir even below the dirt, how can you decide what we we’re worth?

Cannot sing those church words, I’d rather choke

Forgotten by my folk, I’ll sit here burning in the smoke, turning to dust in hell I finally spoke

Cracked the egg, splattered the yoke

Broke through the birdcage in all my rage

When I finally came to age, to reap the harvest of my days, that I felt I slaved away unwanted like I was a waste

Sage to bridge the gap between the meaning, and their hate, their feelings, the truth they lacked, unbelieving

Cannot ever have it huh, the life I lived, the love I gived, but never falter, never slack, keep on walking, splintered, cracked, but I will not ever turn my back, and if I die speaking the truth like this then I can laugh, because I did my very best, and maybe then I’ll have earned my rest

I broke through stone cold iron bars, took my burden, came this far died under the wheels of hate, in the very arms of fate, the lies this heartless world creates, the burden, it was just was just to great

So if you want to see the stars, use your burden, use your scars

Burn your purpose into your eyes, and make them realize you tried, fighting simply to survive, doing what you feel is right, never surrender, stand tall use your might

Become blinded by it, recognize the worthless lies but see the truth and love inside

Defy the world, and a place you’ll find in empty skies, realizing death, the harbinger, the ender, sender of your final demise

Find the emptiness I know, I’ll show you through grey ash and blowing snow, the cold kiss of the dark abyss, the story's end, the reaper's scythe, the angels’ cry, the devil’s bliss, God's very fist, when you realize it's time to die, and you have to say your last goodbyes, at least you ran, at least you tried, whether or not the world will realize your sorrow

My only friend, vaguely missed, please come join me there, my lonely wish

Tomorrow lists our every day, and when we have to fade away, realize our efforts stay, even if forgotten by today

Author's Note

I very seldom reply to reviews, but I promise I read EVERY single one. I look forward to my next review because it helps me learn. Even if it's just one word, I promise, I will be ecstatic to have the chance to hear what you have to say. Whenever you write something about my poems, or the themes of my poems, or criticize me it is not in vain. I will listen, learn and be thankful.

Reviews

[wordman]

this is a great story my friend,i enjoyed it

[R.J Calzonetti (SinisterPotatoe)]

Thanks wordman!