The Ones Who Love Me

A quick poem about living on even if things are hard, for the ones that love me

Pull me back from failure

My availed sailor

I'm slowly growing paler 

The air is growing staler 

And I'm drowning on my dreams

Nothing is as it seems

I see lights and fire above me

People's belongings sinking in the sea

As I fall deeper into my nightmare

There are feelings, memories, I can never share

To protect the ones that care

The lights fade away there is no sound

My heart thumps in my chest

As my body rests on the dark floor of the abyss

I miss my home

I love my family, my friends

As I feel the kiss of death I can't die

I won't embrace the end

I can make things right

I'll breathe in my broken dreams like shards of glass in my lungs

It hurts but I keep breathing

I'm seething with regrets, shame and bad memories

But I'm not ready for the cemetery

My feelings are secondary

I need to be there for the others

I push myself off the ocean floor, heart still beating in my core

A world to explore and even if I'm sore I have to settle the score with my emotions

I make my way above the waves and swim to shore

I cough out my unachievable dreams and drink in my reality

There is still hope for me, still love to see and scars to bleed

The oceans don't own my soul

I loaned it to the ones who love me

Author's Note

I very seldom reply to reviews, but I promise I read EVERY single one. I look forward to my next review, because it helps me learn. Even if it's just one word, I promise, I will be ecstatic to have the chance to hear what you have to say. Whenever you write something about my poems, or the themes of my poems, or criticize me it is not in vain. I will listen, learn and be thankful.

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

A poem of sadness and brokenness, but also of courage and hope. I love the title and picture. I feel " the glass shards" you breathe as you ' drown on your dreams"- your metaphor and imagery use are great. Eloquent, honest words like hands finding purchase to escape from the abyss. Staying connected to the ones we love is key. The last two lines are brilliant. Excellent!

[Maria]

Very deep and intriguing. Loved how you weaved in and out in regards to what a difference it makes to have family and close friends walking alongside your life journey. So true and realistic as well as heart felt. Enjoyed reading this.

[Jackie]

Hthe rhyming was on point. I like how you were able to keep it going . the versatility was great. Flowed nicely. A wonderful read and piece. Keep it going

[Anthony (aka Mr.e)]

Spoken with the strength of a true warrior, nicely done, and much enjoyed!

[Bear]

A poet and philosopher of deep thought, oh to ponder the nightmares of life and the dreams of hope. A very good writing challenge, it shows the depth of your writing skills. Standing Ovation! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Najam Us Saher]

This poem is a very nice gesture from you to those who love you and has supported you..I really liked the way you have written this to express your gratitude.

[Abraham George]

lovely one and the words used so well. BUt i think you lost your Rhyme on the halfway. i think it will be good if you keep that rhyme till the end.

Still a wonderful piece

[wordman]

always nice to have some one to lean on