Always Come Back For More

A quick poem I wrote on my phone

Always come back for more

Hold on, just a little bit longer

It went wrong, but I'm a little bit stronger

Push on, just a little bit higher

It's all gone, hang myself from a telephone wire

 

Fucked up, just a little bit more now

What's sup? Wondering where did my life go.

Trip up, falling flat on my face boy

Red syrup drips down from my nostrils

 

They say I'm drowning in my ignorance

Choking on my pride

Crushed like so many ants

I'm a corpse with misty eyes

Fighting sorrow with my petty existence

Showing my brave face even though I just cried

They yell get your a*s up kid, with persistence

Misery is your bony bride

 

These days I'm a little bit stronger

Holding onto to happiness a little bit longer

Living for the moment

Ignoring bad omens

 

They said I couldn't do it

That I couldn't live through it

That I lost my way

Couldn't make it to today

 

Couldn't last another year

But I pushed through all my fears

 

I'm stronger than you know

Anyway, my life goes

I'll still kiss misery on the lips

My bony bride made me a little stronger

And I'll savor the moment I get ready for the next fight

 

Until the day I die

 

"He's a bit stronger"

That's what they'll say

 

As I get up from the ground

After every punch to the face, I was given by life

 

Because I ran away from the pain so many times

But I always come back for more

Author's Note

Enjoy! And if you have any criticism, I'd be happy to hear it!

I very seldom reply to reviews, but I promise I read EVERY single one. I look forward to my next review, because it helps me learn. Even if it's just one word, I promise, I will be ecstatic to have the chance to hear what you have to say. Whenever you write something about my poems, or the themes of my poems, or criticize me it is not in vain. I will listen, learn and be thankful.

Reviews

[Isimbabi]

I quite like this. It feels as though you wrote with a tune to it. It's nice.

Although I feel you could work on the syllable flow a little.
But it's a good poem.

[Bear]

My mother would say "that is what it means to grow up" maturity is measured by the life challenges you have over come. She also would say "You know your an adult the first time love breaks your heart". Thank you for bringing my mother back to me with these memories, I love when something I read touches deep into me. Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Jackie]

I like your choice of words. the rhymes while you could. and the fact that you expressed your perseverance through a tough time in your life. it was really depictive and just right. keep it up

[KT-B]

we got to keep on keeping on, "there's a good day somewhere" an old colleague of mine was fond of saying - I enjoyed this, it was uplifting, keep having the strength to soldier on through lives dangers, toils and snares - we shall overcome :)

[wordman]

we take it one day at a time

[Stacy Purvis]

Fight the good fight. Fall down 7 times, stand up 8.
This is the perfect "Rising Phoenix" piece.
Never give up, never give in.