Did Anybody Tell Her

I fell in love with you.

I allowed my heart to relish in you.

Your trap was set right on cue.

Your kiss was acute, and my lust

was enveloped in your false truth.

Did any tell her?

Did many smell her?

Did anybody hurt her?

Sadness forever within me.

My immunity was sacred you see,

But it was lights out when she

Stared me down.

More like dynamite.

And now my pleasure is empty.

Did any tell her?

Did many smell he?

Did anybody hurt her?

Vengeance for this slave.

Now, to resist,

I'm locked in a cage.

But still she persist, like a

bandit with a death-wish,

the taste for the flesh is

just another written page.

Did any tell her?

Did many smell her?

Did anybody hurt her?

Baby I'm not a failure.

Baby I'm not a seller.

Baby I'm not a teller.

I want to be all you need,

all you need,

all you need.

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

nice and raw, nice flow, nice cadence awesome sentiment! Your street sense is a dominant factor in your writing style and is one of a fighter and you belie this in your willingness to be open and true to yourself in your write.... a rare quality to BE, what you expect from others! and at the same time open your heart and spill the vulnerabilities out to paper. This is a good place you are in. you place you in your words so well that i would choose you a comrade at arms without hesitation without even knowing you i do in your scrawl

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

The depth we feel linging and wanting is real, sometimes we feel as if weve been dealt an unfair deal- i wish we could sll get what we long for and want - your wmoruons are alive on your page- you can feel the happiness and rage- well written🌹

[M]

This is absolutely beautiful

[Wild Rose]

Love the last verse

Have those sentiments asked and said to me

[Sunshine666]

well done :)
It could even be a song!
very heartfelt.. Thanks for sharing

[Heidi Deblois]

This was really good!!!! you should make more of this kind of poems I have one that has repetition in it.

[boygene borice]

very emotional. I know that feeling when you love and cant be loved back, its terrible and heartbreaking

[Tiffany K Charles]

The struggle for control for ones emotions and when to fully let go.... The classic tale of round about in the war for ones heart and the return of the affection from the other. icely played

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Repetition in the actions here
a tale of attraction and loss with wanting still present.
love not returned.

[Luci]

very well-written, i felt the sadness behind the words. thank you for sharing!