Cut Me Deep

I tap into you

to tap in to me.

Breath out then breath out.

I forget to take a moment to let you in.

That's just the way my breathing

flows.

Can't you see?

Just my cup of tea.

Enter my soul.

You cut me deep.

The deeds of your heart's

teeth has left me a

mouthful of cavities.

Tummy growling,

Have you had enough to eat?

Haven't you had enough of me?

Have you had me,

you wouldn't need

Me.

Finaly,

Love

Me.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

so dark...so hurt and crying out ..damn! powerful poem my friend ... the teeth of the heart is what really grabs me ...so vivid and dynamic ..sheesh ... your title reminds me of "cutters" who deal with pain in just such a way ... so so heart wrenching :(
E.

[sinNsincerity]

That's beautiful E.N.

[April Blue]

I like the way the words flow together... Nicely done...

[sinNsincerity]

Always.......

[barleygirl]

I like the way your expressions are not flowing in a certain direction, but kind of popping here & there, filled with uncertainty, your writing style reflects the confusion one might feel in such a situation. Every line is crafted with originality, which is my favorite thing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[sinNsincerity]

Shattered and Scattered like as broken windshield...
Thank you Margie, such a pleasure to hear your thoughts.

[ari]

holy shizzle this is good! At first, I was like this doesn't make sense but damn is it good. I can relate sadly.

[sinNsincerity]

That's just me... falling down...

[M. E. Lee]

I feel this is such a beautiful piece. Very powerful.

[sinNsincerity]

'Twas my pleasure

[Rama Masri]

I like the meaning you give this, and the thought you put into it. Keep up the great work.

[Falanne Shanta]

This was so deep. You did a wonderful job.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so Ms. Shanta, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Sarah]

Dark and sweet :)
Thanks for sharing

[sinNsincerity]

That's me . . .

[Alecia]

wonderful!!! for some reason I can even picture where you were writing this, setting and all.

[sinNsincerity]

On my phone
On my porch
smoking a cig . . .

[Alecia]

scary..because that's what I pictured! you have some talent my friend

[sinNsincerity]

A pleasure Alecia. I put in a lot of work, study, and magik into my craft.

[Lucia]

I love your interpretation of sensation, inspired me to take on a similar concept

[Emma]

Beautiful and delicate sadness. I have to give extra compliment to
'Breath out then breath out.
I forget to take a moment to let you in.'
The subtle, innocent remorse as you were so encapsulated in the moment you lost the simplest of acts, yet it has so much deeper meaning of appreciation and awareness. Lovely focus on the mouth throughout, and the sensations of emptiness with the loss of them. Original and inspiring. Well done.