Cut Me Deep

I tap into you

to tap in to me.

Breath out then breath out.

I forget to take a moment to let you in.

That's just the way my breathing

flows.

Can't you see?

Just my cup of tea.

Enter my soul.

You cut me deep.

The deeds of your heart's

teeth has left me a

mouthful of cavities.

Tummy growling,

Have you had enough to eat?

Haven't you had enough of me?

Have you had me,

you wouldn't need

Me.

Finaly,

Love

Me.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

so dark...so hurt and crying out ..damn! powerful poem my friend ... the teeth of the heart is what really grabs me ...so vivid and dynamic ..sheesh ... your title reminds me of "cutters" who deal with pain in just such a way ... so so heart wrenching :(
E.

[sinNsincerity]

That's beautiful E.N.

[John the Baptist]

Has the sound of a twisted type of love. The speaker comes across as something of a masochist. I do not understand the lines: "Have you had me/you wouldn't need/Me."

[Tiffany K Charles]

such a wonderful read young ma'am. Now try to create a story from such a theme and you will have many loathing the words of your thoughts right down to the very soul ...... they will enjoy it .

[richieb]

Very deep and powerful. As usual you leave a lot to think about. Fine write my friend.
Richie b.

[Forevermore]

Powerful, and very deep. This is a beautiful piece, I love your style.

[LKBillips]

I'm not going to lie, this one is too deep for me. But I like the style and descriptions.

[bella brown]

wow every out there brought tears to my heart

[Lavi]

Damn, this is good work. There's a lot of situational awareness too (couldn't think of the right word for perspective) which is crazy good too. Shame I can't measure myself up to this kind of format writing but that doesn't stop me from reading and loving other people's skills in doing what I cannot.

So true too. Love cuts deep in our souls.

[Autumn Falls]

"The deeds of your heart's teeth has left me a mouthful of cavities" That is a good line. So dark, i love it!

[sinNsincerity]

"Tis true...

[Bunni]

I felt your pain throughout. I feel as though we met n I looked into your soul. This will stay with me.

[sinNsincerity]

If I cast a spell, would you lose control?
I hope I stay with you.

[Jas]

This makes me think of my current relationship, at times we are at each others throats then in an instant I’m in his arms and it feels like home

[sinNsincerity]

Yep, that sound about right.