It's hard to have a skill that relies so heavily on trauma, in all of its forms, to produce work that doesn't seem plastic. It's a good piece, I liked it. I think the harder emotions yield beautiful work. Of course, this calls into question the standard of beauty - but, that's a longer post. ^_^
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
I've grown in ways that it's the only way. Trauma is why I began to write, and now it has become my .. read moreI've grown in ways that it's the only way. Trauma is why I began to write, and now it has become my only love.
the truth the whole truth and nothing but the truth eh!? ;) very much like your clever word play closing ... the journey through your poem so relatable ...too many times ...back to the cave we go ..loving the sadness ...trying to make sense of it all :( ahhhhhhhhh love! ;}
E.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Gotta make the people love the truth rather than hate it right? Thank you for reading Sir, I'm glad .. read moreGotta make the people love the truth rather than hate it right? Thank you for reading Sir, I'm glad that you loved it.
"Fell in love with
the sadness,
which later,
became my passion." - First off, I absolutely love how plainly you've written this. It's not only relatable, but very comforting in the way of giving tragedy an identity.
"The black became my friend." - I really like the sudden abruptness of this sentence.
"Bested by the
light I was given." - this is a lovely sentence.
"So I caved in,
sorta like a caveman.
Then I died
again when she
glanced in." - I found it interesting and functional to add a bit of humor, or something representing that it
was attempted. It kind of gives me the image of someone who is heartbroken and trying to laugh it off or make light of their pain.
"I asked myself,
“should we dance
again?”
I couldn’t make up my mind so,
I fell back into the black
and wandered through
Wonders." - I found this absolutely beautiful. Relatable in a way that is hard to put into words and yet very keenly felt.
"And now we’re back here,
falling in love with sadness
again.
So mote it be" - again, you've expressed this in a wonderful way. The idea of falling in love with sadness is something so real and comforting to those who have done so, intentionally or not. The ending makes it a prayer or a spell and all the more bittersweet.
Overall, I loved this piece top to bottom and I think you've done a solid job on getting both your ideas and emotion across. Too often I read poems and simply see them, but I definitely felt this piece. Thank you much for sharing and keep up the good work!
-Rynn
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
A spell indeed. As are all my poems.
Thank you for reading Rynn, I really enjoyed your anal.. read more A spell indeed. As are all my poems.
Thank you for reading Rynn, I really enjoyed your analysis and the thoughts and feelings you produced. Just what I love to see.
The poem is very good. I appreciate that you got into this subject and didn't make it boring. It is short and on the subject.
My favorite lines were:
"Then I died
again when she
glanced in.
I asked myself,
“should we dance
again?”
You have a way of taking the reader on a ride! I LOVE, LOVE, the emotion in this piece! Your work is where truth combines with reality opening up for all to feel connected in some way to the pieces you write! Well done! I fell in love with sadness before.
Tabby
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you for reading Tabby, always such a pleasure to hear from you. And thank you for thinking so,.. read moreThank you for reading Tabby, always such a pleasure to hear from you. And thank you for thinking so, to take the reader on a trip is one of the goals as well as speaking truth and making connections.
It's hard to have a skill that relies so heavily on trauma, in all of its forms, to produce work that doesn't seem plastic. It's a good piece, I liked it. I think the harder emotions yield beautiful work. Of course, this calls into question the standard of beauty - but, that's a longer post. ^_^
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I've grown in ways that it's the only way. Trauma is why I began to write, and now it has become my .. read moreI've grown in ways that it's the only way. Trauma is why I began to write, and now it has become my only love.
The phrase. "back into the black" really sticks with me. In a few short words it describes a very strong emotion, one many of us can relate to at times. Wonderful write!
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Sweet, I'm glad that that phrase did stick out to you. I almost changed that into darkness, but then.. read moreSweet, I'm glad that that phrase did stick out to you. I almost changed that into darkness, but then again, I wanted it to remain generalized so that the reader can think on their own and make of it as they wish. I love hearing what the reader feels, thinks, and believes, rather than, I telling them. Thank you once again Dara.