Island Bonfire

My heart breaths musty

Trust me

Ask she

Surely,

the stench of my

Love will thrust thee

against me.

Vulturing through

mountains and valleys. . .

I'm starving,

but my problems desert me

when speaking through

Joshua trees.

Can you hear me?

If not,

please feel my

energy of thirst.

Enter the Garden of Hesperides

and find paradise in my mind.

Mind you

become mindful

of the moon's full.

And if so,

My love will be

4 you.

Author's Note

So mote it be
The Black Cat

Reviews

[Erika]

I like The imagery that the descriptive words brought to mind. It provoked an intense emotion as I was reading, almost confrontational, but not in a violent or angry way.
Not sure if that’s where you were when you wrote it but hey...either way, I liked it

[sinNsincerity]

I always come from my heart.

[John the Baptist]

Had difficulty with ''Ask she/ Surely''. Not sure who is speaking here. It has the sound of some malevolent spirit whispering in the subconscious of a mentally ill person. I can't think of anyone else whose love could have a stench.

[Tiffany K Charles]

mmmmmmmmmmmmm.............. Nice one love....... very nice....

[sinNsincerity]

Always Tiff.

[Emma]

Loved the punchy lines at the start, with the rhyming and short line lengths. Made it feel very active. Words like 'starving', 'stench' and 'thirst' made me really feel that it was an extreme desire and need for the other person. I liked.

[sinNsincerity]

I want you to want me. Need you to need me...

[ayesha cullen]

Pretty strong and evocative.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Ayesha.

[Ayushi Jha]

BEAUTIFUL! The intricacy of the thoughts that this poem is trying to convey is so beautifully knitted that I am struck. Loved it!

[sinNsincerity]

My pleasure Ayushi.

[Asante]

I'm starving,
but my problems desert me
when speaking through
Joshua trees.

That little strip there was flawless, bro. Desert, Joshua Trees, etc. I vibe with this overall. I get an Indie/Underground rap kind of feeling when I read this, too.

Had to pop in & check out your latest!

[sinNsincerity]

Dude, I know right. That s**t is magikal!

[Coyote Poetry]

Gentle, worthwhile and wonderful words for love. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to proper ending. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

The relation to the title escapes me as I read on...
there's a presence of a relationship and bad vibes
and the sense of smell is not a good one.
Something went bad and rotted but did it leave?

[Diane]

Different. In a good way. Nice to read something different from time to time.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Diane, I'm glad that I could be different for you.