My Faithful Bosom

It's been days since I've seen her face,

so I'm dazed and deluded from the ambrosia

of thoughts left behind from Cupid's arrow of amnesia.

Impatient with forgotten time.

My forgotten mind has left cracks in sundials from broken memories.

Allthewhile, out of my mind, and the plight of the forsaken path has lead me in a zigzag, and despite the hidden angles, fate has guided me straight towards your twine of guile and luxury.

Dear Angel, your galaxy is excellent when

kissing on your innocence.

How intimate

How excellent

How?

Please

Please me

please love me

Please me please

Please love me, please.

Are you pleased?

Author's Note

Gothspel

Reviews

[Minnie]

Very well written, it is not traditional but that's a good thing! Way to go!

[Delmar Cooper]

Love the photo of Bettye Page in the brassiere. Hard to follow that with poetry.

[sinNsincerity]

So hoe did I do?

[Delmar Cooper]

I don't know how you did. I suppose that depends on what you wanted to do, which is between you and the poem. I left the page thinking the poem was about a needy and confused lover. Could it be that all lovers are needy and confused?

[Einstein Noodle]

awwwwwwwwwww love the vulnerability and your play with words and alterations .. separating them a tad is pretty cool ..i think i will take that tool with me for some misty future poem ;) i usually put them one after the other and it never occurred to me to do otherwise ... very emotive ...i leave my begging heart at the alter and can only hope ...

[Alex Ware]

I can feel the ramping desperation of those last lines matched by the changing structure of the poem - surprisingly effective.

[Matthew Kult]

Desperately Needing

Great Read

Matthew

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Really enjoyed this piece and all it gives to be considered. Desperation and entanglement that comes from love and our need to feel it is so accurately captured here.

My favorite line...

so I'm dazed and deluded from the ambrosia
of thoughts left behind from Cupid's arrow of amnesia.

[LKBillips]

The structure of the poem fascinates me. The theme like a confusing dream that you don't want to leave. Nice.

[HC Abiona]

The need to be pleased , loved, and to please the one that you love... Very nice

[wordman]

the sweet sound of love,this is what we should be about

[Ruth Anne Garcia]

Nice wording. I like your work very much.