Her Vail

The moon calls down to me.

Your Majesty.

Are you mad at me?

What's the cause for this summoning?

She has done more than

Swept me off my feet.

A Love catastrophe,

But not a travesty.

What a feat...

She lures the water from within.

Outer-body.

I'm out of my body.

Are you the existence of my sin?

The 9 over my 6.

~Astrology~

Astromancer.

My Cancer.

Two Crescents,

But is it you

That'll make me full?

So I close my eyes

To see if I'm alive.

I need you to reply!

Do I need to die

To find the truth that

Lies in your lies?

My most pleasant high.

Hard to believe in

That you are hard to believe in.

The reason why my heart is bleeding.

I have a need for more,

But I don't need you anymore.

War in

Days of

Yesterdays.

You left me far behind the sun's rays.

Reviews

[~barefoot empress~]

I identify with so many aspects of this. It seems to be uniquely crafted. (I read quite a bit on in the site. More often than not, if I have no constructive criticism, or praise then, I don't leave a review at all)
This was a nice change of pase for me. I found the twists within such a short amount of writing, impressive and refreshing. There is a other worldly romance, mixed with a bit of a seductive tango. In the small amount of lines used, the imagery was conveyed vividly and beautifully. Personally, I feel like that is what your standard poetry is about. Conveying and demonstrating as much feeling as possible through the use of carefully orchestrated phrases.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
♤BE♤

[sinNsincerity]

'Twas my pleasure Barefoot Empress.

[Giulia King]

Your words are dancing around in my head. This was magical to read :)

[MoonChild]

I loved every word of this. Congratulations on an excellent poem.

[Ana B.]

This absolutely otherworldly. In love with the sweet sensual play of words. As always, your work is magic.

Your fan, Ana. :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Ana, I always look forward to hear what you think. I'm so glad that you enjoyed it and the magik I try to present.
-David

[nikki.s.]

This is so smooth. It is so deep but at the same time flows very lightly. I loved it

[Wajiha Nayeem]

so good...so crisp...wonderfully done...keep going.

[Tabby Mac]

You are so clever I can't stand it! Great write! Love it!!
Tabby

[EcstaticEuphoria]

...... "but I don't need you anymore"
So powerful! So true, beautiful. It draws me in.

[wordman]

a deep and touching write my friend

[Kittenincake]

This sounds like a moon Goddess. Ethereal and a pleasure to read.

"She lures the water from within.
Outer-body.
I'm out of my body.
Are you the existence of my sin?"