Wow, very poetic. Love your choice of words and how you weaved them. I like that you avoid filler words and have an immense amount of meaning in your context.
My favorite line: "Can you see the bruise that was
Laid upon my chest?
Underneath the branch is where my heart sings." Well done, I'll be reading more of your work.
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7 Years Ago
Thank you so much, I'm more than glad that you enjoyed it! Take care and have a great day.
7 Years Ago
I totally agree with the above review, couldn't had written it better myself
I've read this a few times. I just wanted to truly absorb it before commenting.
The sincerety, passion, and tenderness in this piece is endearing...
Perfect rhythm and feel conveyed.
Thank you so much for sharing.
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Thank you for taking your time with it Anastasia, I pit a lot into it.
Wow, very poetic. Love your choice of words and how you weaved them. I like that you avoid filler words and have an immense amount of meaning in your context.
My favorite line: "Can you see the bruise that was
Laid upon my chest?
Underneath the branch is where my heart sings." Well done, I'll be reading more of your work.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you so much, I'm more than glad that you enjoyed it! Take care and have a great day.
7 Years Ago
I totally agree with the above review, couldn't had written it better myself
Very beautiful, elegant and classy. I love the reference to the plight of Daphne and her fight for perpetual virginity from a shot of lead.
Apollo and Daphne is an interesting way to convey the interest and wild desire of someone virginal, pure and although there, they are rather unattainable.
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7 Years Ago
Thank you Harlotte, I have been reading a lot of Greek and Roman Lit as of late and just thought it'.. read moreThank you Harlotte, I have been reading a lot of Greek and Roman Lit as of late and just thought it'll be cool if I put my own twist on things. I'm really glad that you did love it!
''Allow us to grow from within. '' damn, but that hit to close to home. Lovely write dear David, the last 5 lines are sheer perfection, both sense and style.
Your fan,
Ana.
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Did it really?
Thank you so much Ana, I highly appreciate that and I'm so glad that you enjo.. read moreDid it really?
Thank you so much Ana, I highly appreciate that and I'm so glad that you enjoyed this one.
The muse makes your wanderings quite poetic and romantic. I can feel the beginning of spring everywhere here, not only in your poem, on this page in general, the emotions are getting lighter and jump around in their brightened state calling for love.
"But deeper I go cause I wanna see your roots", how very relatable. There's no true worship without depth. The muse is the keeper of such and a proper lover. I like how you've woven the soft words into your modern style.
They speak to me in many ways and keep me driven.
I'm glad that you like it Vanessa. I'm alwa.. read moreThey speak to me in many ways and keep me driven.
I'm glad that you like it Vanessa. I'm always trying to take something and make it my own as well as thinking of new ideas.
-David