Paradise Lost

Paper hearts.

No paper clips.

Just paper cuts.

Tin cups and string nights

connected and collected

like thoughts of the

darkest and enlightened plots.

A sword to fall on; such as,

a poets lust.

Yikes!

-Was her reply.

We both believed in the power of magic.

So hungry for the knowledge to provide one another,

but we were only willing to share half of the brain.

So Divine;

yet,

tragic.

The view...

Of your soul

was solely my food.

Causing me to sleepwalk through

dewy slumbers

with nothing to remember.

Drowning...

But finally,

your heart has been unveiled

as a cloud of omens.

I mean amens.

A love cursed,

yet blessed.

I dare you to love me.

Author's Note

T.W.A
Gothpel

Reviews

[Katelyn Kennedy]

I like how deep the poem is then you end it with "I dare you" making it seem playful and light hearted.

[sinNsincerity]

I can go deeper.
Thank you Katelyn.

[Jenny]

"as a cloud of omens./ i mean amens"

love it!

thanks for sharing!
J

[Hebe]

Splendid! ... a broken heart with bitter- sweet memories ... you expressed it so charmingly! loved it..

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Milton would have appreciated the structure and flow of this piece. The anticipated raise and the inevitable fall! Great write ..

[sinNsincerity]

Milton was so wickedly awesome hehe
Thank you so much!
-David

[Angies Bipolar World]

very very thoughtful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[SunnyDaze]

"Causing me to sleepwalk through
dewy slumbers
with nothing to remember.
Drowning..."

My favorite lines. This writing was indeed masterful and utterly entrancing. Well done.

[Njeri Brooks]

A "poets lust" should be a "poet's lust".

Other than that, I found this to be very intriguing. The very last line left me on the hook.

~~N. Brooks

[Ana B.]

hmm...speculative view of a bittersweet or maybe slow poison that the afflicted seems to enjoy :) But it has been long ago established that the things we love and enjoy are the ultimate downfall. Splendid done.

Your fan A.

[sinNsincerity]

I'll take the slow poison... yea hehe

[MsJewel]

Bittersweet and beautiful! :) Julie

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Julie, so great to hear from you.

[Tabby Mac]

I enjoyed this piece. I'm not sure the real meaning but I sensed a message of attraction, the kind that is instant and exciting but guarded because of experience and wisdom...or is it fear and insecurity...wanted but afraid to be forced...a feeling like love but unsure...is it hallow or solid? And then ended with...a dare... reality of love ignited spelled out with a dying flame.
I liked it! The feeling I felt while reading it was hesitation. Not sure the intent? Well written!
Tabby