Rain of My Lord

An Angel screamed when I was born,

And at the same time,

I was scorched,

Because my innocence was lost.

Baptized,

Took communion,

And confirmed it.

What a sermon.

itwasperfect

You should’ve heard it...

Yet, an exodus was leading me away.

And now,

I’m beating down tradition.

A plight that led my way.

Away from you.

Away from me.

Are you lonely?

'Cause I am.

Come along with me.

Let's pack up this Genesis

And make a way

Away with this belief.

Best believe I'm dammed,

So I search the six under the nine.

But I need you because

There's a void;

In my heart,

In your mind,

In our soul.

Oh my.

A new creature.

Who can be such?

But such as the aroma of my patience,

I'll stand here and there,

But never near.

Ever so clear.

Author's Note

Let my poems be the rain

Reviews

[Asya Kardzhaliyska]

You had some really beautiful imagery here and the emotion of the poem really came through- the only thing I felt didn't really work was the line "and my innocence was lost", that felt a little cliche to me, though it's just a suggestion so you can feel free to ignore it!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Asya, I really appreciate you taking the time to read this and I'm glad that you had enjoyed it.
-David

[Asya Kardzhaliyska]

That's alright, I'm glad I could help!

[outspoken1234]

I love how it imidetly catches your attention and your wording is flawless.thank you for requesting me to read it.

[outspoken1234]

I love how it imidetly catches your attention and your wording is flawless.thank you for requesting me to read it.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so, and no worries.

[aLittlePain]

'But such is the aroma of my patience' super line, I love that thought very much also the scattered biblical references add to the mood and imagery. R xo

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Rach, I'm glad to hear so, and I also love that line. It's so magical.

[aLittlePain]

You're welcome, I agree it is

[Lady Pearl]

There's a void;
In my heart,
In your mind,
In our soul.

What i love about these verses is how this void has made you connected through the soul. as if it is one.

not sure if this is what you intended. but it's beautiful.

Incredible writing.

[sinNsincerity]

I did intend it to be one. I write in 3's to symbolize the holy trinity,

[Zoya]

What a wild imagination you have! And that's clearly visible in the poem...Good work!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Zoya, I'm glad that you'd enjoyed it.

[Zoya]

My pleasure!

[Alessander]

I like the idea of patience having an aroma.
Original.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so Alessander, I'm glad you'd did.

[Asante]

Wow, this is excellent. From the biblical wordage used, to the top-notch pictures etched out of those words, this was one of my favorites. May your poems be the rain to cleanse, indeed, brother. Fine write.

[sinNsincerity]

Man, thank you bro, I really appreciate that. I actually held onto this one for three months and wasn't so sure about posting it, but I was digging it last light.

[Dolce Vita]

Liked the continued biblical imagery running through this.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Dolce, I'm glad that you did. It's a part of me...

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Wow. This poem is very good. Very good imagery. Loved this piece. Good job :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Lauren, I'm really glad that you do!

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Youre welcome :)

[Cara]

one word... wow
But I need you because
There's a void;
In my heart,
In your mind,
In our soul.
amazing
thank you for sharing. i really loved reading it

[sinNsincerity]

It's my pleasure Cara, and I'm so glad that those lines stood out to you.