Nice writing my man, I enjoyed it. Nothing wrong with telling ourselves we will survive. Learning from past challenges, I wear my scars as badges of honor.
Richie b.
We always tell ourselves so many things, yet many of them are comforting lies to keep us sane in this broken world. I really liked this piece, especially how your structure became smaller and smaller as I read on. It really gave a strong feeling of something being told, but not believed, such as everything is going to be alright, when it's really not. Awesome piece!
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8 Years Ago
The lies often drive me insane as well, so I tend to let things be without force while keeping faith.. read moreThe lies often drive me insane as well, so I tend to let things be without force while keeping faith in a true true love.
I constructed that way so that it would off that eh feeling. Like f**k it, move on...
Beautifully written, bro. Honestly. Insane how we have to negotiate with a heart that physically belongs to us, but would lead us to believe otherwise.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you bro, and it is such a shame. I tend to stay out of my head when it comes to the heart beca.. read moreThank you bro, and it is such a shame. I tend to stay out of my head when it comes to the heart because it'll drive me 'to insanity.
Man, teach me your ways because I may not have gotten that far yet, even if I know it would help som.. read moreMan, teach me your ways because I may not have gotten that far yet, even if I know it would help sometimes.
You win some... you lose some! Hard to tell sometimes when you first buy-in, but if we don't risk our heart we'll always just be home alone... Nice metaphors here.
Very nice use of words and thoughts.
"Reckless abandonment...
But hey,
I'll be alright."
I liked the above lines. Accepting blame without concern. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Always a pleasure to hear from you Sir, and I'm well pleased that you enjoyed it.
Interesting, you connote a broken home besides a broken heart in this piece, instead of warranty i would have used insurance because there isnt one for love. Heres a thought you inspired just right now after I read this......Love dont always guarantee insurance. Blind sided by false assurance of a future existence when consumed by the pleasant intensity of the chemistry. But when jealousy, complexity, zealotry are factored couples often become b******s. Not knowing that their love became substandard headed towards a relationship thats completely devoured and leave nothing but cowered hearts that are unable to start over because of the hostile closure, which began this foreclosure...Loves ugly exposure.
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8 Years Ago
I admire your consideration and do appreciate it, but each phrase takes on a life of it's own I beli.. read moreI admire your consideration and do appreciate it, but each phrase takes on a life of it's own I believe and It would be a shame to go back and change what is written. I'm more than stoked it was able to inspire you though. I think that's simply amazing.