Nice writing my man, I enjoyed it. Nothing wrong with telling ourselves we will survive. Learning from past challenges, I wear my scars as badges of honor.
Richie b.
It must be the worst feeling ever to feel emotionally bankrupt.
But you'll be fine one day. You'll surely wake up one day without feeling empty
and you'll be totally fine because you'll be rich with love from the person who really care for you.
I love your poem!
I enjoy your poems. They are very clever and unique! I enjoy the meaning and your word choices! This one too!
Well penned!
I tripped through this line a bit while reading...
"I've must of lost a dozen homes.."
Did you mean...I must have lost a dozen homes?
Tabby
Posted 7 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you Ms. Mac, what I meant to say was "musta" as in must have.
I have to say that I think this is one of my favorite poems you've wrote. I love the word place, and the emotion pack into such few words. Fantastic job!
I often feel the same way. Emotionally bankrupt. Drained. But one side of my brain then starts to fight with the other side of my brain over whether or not I'll be fine or the fine will be me. It's a struggle, but if it isn't a struggle, it isn't life.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Most certainly it wouldn't be life without loves debt. Thank you for reading, I'm more than glad tha.. read moreMost certainly it wouldn't be life without loves debt. Thank you for reading, I'm more than glad that you were able to relate.
well done metaphor held throughout ...i have a terrible time doing that ... syntax is a stumble in this "I've must of lost a dozen homes;" ... at least for me anyway ... i love the form .. the trailing off in closing is perfect ... brings it all home says i! and the pic is astounding ...i am compelled to look at the faces deeply .. for a long time .. the pain, dismay and anger i see is profound .. it adds another emotive level or two to your expression
E.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
It hasta...
Hasta be Shasta.
6 Years Ago
;) the change fits .. and again..love the metaphor ...warrenties, banks and loans have been pushed s.. read more;) the change fits .. and again..love the metaphor ...warrenties, banks and loans have been pushed shoved and busted in the recent past ... one must use good common sense to be friends with them ;)