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My heart's a sleeper cell.

It's as sleepless as hell,

But here is where I rest...

A Midsummer Night's Dream.

Come.

Com'on!

Don't be frightened.

I promise

- it's quite Shakespearean.

More like Marlowe's Dr. Faustus.

No pentagram,

Just a madman's ventures

For virtue and sin.

Let me in.

But it's dark here...

Blackened soul,

So no need for a blackened mirror

When dwelling on reflections.

I seek metamorphosis as did Ovid,

While resisting Mephistopheles...

Reviews

[Stacey Appleby]

I love this especially the first part " my minds a sleeper cell as sleepless as hell". It reminds me of my mind when there are a million things whizzing around inside and i can't sleep. I also liked this bit "just a madman's ventures for virtue and sin". It reminds me that everyone seeks adventure in their life.

[sinNsincerity]

Nicely said Stacey, that is what I was going for when I wrote that line. The madness within...

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, very clever the first two lines tell of the grinding of gears that never rest. Then your references, they are very impressive. Izzy

[Valentine]

A funny place to ask to be let into. I try to avoid all dark places. Valentine

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Loved it all thoroughly. Something that I always appreciate: simple yet powerful.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Fahmida, I'm glad that you'd enjoyed it.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Well penned!

Your flow is very nicely done with well-expressed choices conveying splendid results.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so Josie.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

If only I could spend my whole time reading poetry and commenting--wouldn't that be so splendid and indeed a wonderful way to pass my time. You're welcome!

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Wow, very creative and imaginative. Very good job :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Lauren, I appreciate it,

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

You're welcome :)

[Tionge Rosalie Johnson]

Wow! you really know your stuff! I love how philosophical you get in your pieces, really adds to the theme and mood of your poetry. To me, I love how the philosophical aspect of the piece gives off that "coming of age" vibe or the idea of "rebirth."

Your writing really makes me think, and I'm enjoying it so much!

[sinNsincerity]

I believe all good writing should make you think and I'm trying to get there. I've just scratched the surface and still need to go beneath it much more. Baby steps!

[Brooke]

I really don't know anything about poetry but I'm thoroughly impressed with your references!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Brooke!

[Ms. Twitch]

I enjoyed the references and it has this fast pace when I'm reading it. May be a bit overwhelming that maybe some details could possibly slow it down to paint more vivid images. Overall, still amazing and good vibes to your writing.

[Kathrin S]

I like your writing style, it flows well. The poem was really interesting and I had to read it twice.

One thing that I would consider working on is "- it's quite Shakespearean./ More like Marlowe's Dr Faustus." I thought the change from 'it's Shakespearean' to 'now it's more like Marlowe' was a bit too rapid. Which one is it? If the answer is both, maybe reconsider the 'more like' - it seems like you're contradicting yourself here.

Anyway, that's just my opinion. I'm not a poet myself. Overall a really well-written piece!

[sinNsincerity]

Contradictions surround us daily. What do you thing life is? I'm just tapping into them.
I do appreciate you thoughts do and take them into consideration.
Thank you Kathrin.