If I Tell you

Toss me all of your secrets.
Can't you tell?
I have yet to spew out
One truth to you.
Cut open my brain,
You'll never find the memories,
But I'll always remember.
Vague and distant;
Yet,
I can recall it all in an instant.
The bottomless pit!
You couldn't find God,
So you prayed your
Acceptance into my heart.
Shhh...
I won't say what you did with your lips.
How about your hips?
How about???

Reviews

[CAPOLAVORO]

I got interested in the title and have some thoughts in my mind already. Somehow, the exceeded my expectation, this one I must say is short but not simple. It does not require too much thinking yet emotions are intact in the words.

"Shhh...
I won't say what you did with your lips.
How about your hips?
How about???"
This is the part where everything seemed to fall exactly the way you want it to be. The rhyme did not made it. The secret behind did. All in all, weel done. :)

Good poem for romance.

-Capolavoro

[sinNsincerity]

Shhhhhhh...

[Writer_next_door]

This is quite an interesting poem, I must say. It's puzzling. I'm giving it a thumbs up.

[V]

Very interesting and so deeply thoughtful, even though pretty simply written, there's an attitude about it which gets the reader hooked from the first sentences on, the last lines from lips to hips read so expressive, really good.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Very interesting poem. Very good job :) :)

[Nina H.]

An interesting read. Well written. The ending leaves you thinking of so many different possibilities.

[Polysterene]

I Can feel a sense of either remorse or regret in this? Am I correct. Makes me want to read more.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

The poem leaves a puzzling thought. But you are good with words, needless to say.
Good work.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A striking piece that is subtle in delivery, one to re-read, well done.

[Gabija]

I really like it! One of my favorite poems I saw on this site. great job!

[wordman]

sound like satan jumping in when she didn1t hear from god

[guy drori]

I'm assuming you purposely placed three question marks at the last line - "How about???" it gives a sense of desperation the speaker of the poem has, as if he is shouting it or strongly eager to discover the answer. I liked it and glad I read. Good job and waiting to read more :)