Wow like how you state the narrator know she loves him but he can don't have her till he is down which make him wish to write more so it takes I'm further from bwing done and from her. This is very powerful. He wishes to love her but only knows of one way. That way he know just can not be done for some reason unknown to the reader. He wishes to find a different way for the love he has is forbade by that reason. It is a iner struggle between ones desires and what one can have. He wishestablished to love her but doestrogen not know how. So you both yore for each other but something or someone is keeping you apart. And you wish for that to end which means time is standing in your way. But you can wait but you do not wish to wait. I to know this feeling it has past now I may love the one I crave but that's because time passed. So you to will be able to love the one who you so dearly love if you have not already. I love how you used words that have a deep feel to them. This was a wonderful read. I loved it so much. Keep on working to gain your love and writing. Thank you for sharing!
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
It is the timing and I'm glad to hear you and your beloved have been able to hold on to that love. T.. read moreIt is the timing and I'm glad to hear you and your beloved have been able to hold on to that love. The woman I speak on, we have been knowing each other for eight years now, but we both know we are soul mates. Just patiently waiting for the timing to be right.
Your analysis was dead on.
Another fantastic piece:)
Powerful wording that oozes with emotion,
all in due time when you find the one that you will
have the opportunity to love they way your heart desires,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!
This was really great, it reads like a rap, maybe it's supposed to, but it goes way deeper than that. This was fun and meaningful.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
I don't intend for it to read like a rap. I just use a lot of writing techniques I have learned in s.. read moreI don't intend for it to read like a rap. I just use a lot of writing techniques I have learned in school and old writers, and learning how to merge specific things together with no-hold-bars...
It is much deeper, and I'm getting closer