God in the Ninth Inning

Women think deep!

Who do you think taught me?

Who do you think inspired this poetry?

Who do you think?

Quite insistent.

Smell the incense?

White M@gik!

But deeper I go;

Quite subliminal...

Because lately,

Mrs. 7even-6ix  has forgotten about me.

She was digging me...

The horned mermaid left me at sea.

My Capricornuns Mistress.

Showing and taking it all in a blink.

3rd 3y3ed sacrifice.

Exposing me,

So I can view her compositions.

Feeling the feelings,

But the honesty of humanity

Has told me

F**K YOUR FEELINGS!

Quite insistent.

So I read in the lines-

In between my mind

In between my honesty

In between...

But please,

Please,

Get out of me.

Author's Note

Abracadabara
I create as I speak



Battle-Star-Galactica Heart/Love,
Novela,
Gothspel-Poetry,
Done-with-Secular-Poerty,
Are-U-Still-Down,
Magik

Reviews

[PaintedBirdy]

i definitely enjoyed this.

with the first line "women think deep!" i can interpret this two ways, which make the following parts have different meanings. it's either a plea for women to think deep or a statement that deep thinking is what women do. i'm not sure if you intended this as ambiguous but my first read-through was the interpretation that it's a plea for women to think deep about why you write poetry, and the answer is because of another woman. haha. i can, sadly, relate. haha.

i laughed pretty hard at the "F**K YOUR FEELINGS" part because i didn't expect to read that so boldly, but i definitely see the truth of how 'humanity' tells guys to interpret women's feelings. i like the word play in the next few lines about 'reading between.' i really like the creativity you got here. damn good!

[sinNsincerity]

Well personally, women are the closest thing to God, so I worship them as well... Every women I have met has taught me a little more about myself, them, and the world.
But I do use ambiguity a lot in my writing. It leave people to think, "what the hell is going on here...?"

[Tessa Melendez]

It's an interesting piece. The inclusion of numbers is strange to me, but I'm sure there's a meaning behind it. I don't know what it is though. There is a very noticeable sense of sadness in the poem and I feel like there is a message saying that life doesn't care about your feelings, you're expected to move on through it no matter what.

[sinNsincerity]

The doctor have deep meeting indeed, I speak on it but figuratively. Not a deep sadness, not to say it wasn't there before, but now acceptance allows me to just want to be left alone. Let me create!

[Eli Castor]

Poetry really isn't my thing, but I really like this piece. It was very interesting, and I love the use of numbers and symbols. Also, the poem in itself is very dynamic. The first couple of lines I read with confidence, but then when I read "The horned mermaid left me at sea", I felt the poem take a sad turn. And towards the end it felt like you were shouting and pleading.

Very cool stuff.

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad it had a sense of attraction.
I'm also glad you noticed the juxtaposition because it is something I'm dabbling in. To set something up, and then rip it away at the last minute.
Twas my pleasure Eli!