"My blues were never broken
Just bruises you took for misfortunes."
"The Hook to your Neverland- but that just didn't Pan out."
This poem reads so easily and beautifully, I am curious how natural this one came to you. I absolutely love this one!
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Not natural at all, more like supernatural! Almost like a possession unexplainable feelings, thought.. read moreNot natural at all, more like supernatural! Almost like a possession unexplainable feelings, thoughtso, and something I've yet to discover... To be honest, I never wanted to be a writer. I was on my way to be a chef when something inside or above me to me to stop everything I was do in life and to just start writing about whatever. It's hard to explain, I have basically dropped a life that I believed I was supposed to lead and have taken on writing full time. I don't even know why, but it feels so right. It's not like I sit down and say, "okay, imma write one this topic," something greater than I "God" I believe commands me to do so when the moment is right. Idk, I stop ask why and how and just do it....
Goddamn I love this.... Your talk of opposites & halves, & implications of "whole" & even further beyond ("outside") is universally awesome. Taking what lurks down here... and turning it into something of beauty through abstract technique & measures ---- an artist.
Sin in sincerity, good in goodbye, lie in life, art in earth, parent in apparently. There is so much more in many things and just like this cool poem, so much more is in it that is hidden.
I enjoyed your poem. This is a great journey. I feel so many things go unsaid and those are the ones we regret the most. Yet as you said "No formula for the potion" my favorite line from this piece.
When you are in love you want to be the other persons missing piece. You need to be so indispensable that they need you to feel complete.....but somehow things do not always work out that way.
Very well written.