"My blues were never broken
Just bruises you took for misfortunes."
"The Hook to your Neverland- but that just didn't Pan out."
This poem reads so easily and beautifully, I am curious how natural this one came to you. I absolutely love this one!
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Not natural at all, more like supernatural! Almost like a possession unexplainable feelings, thought.. read moreNot natural at all, more like supernatural! Almost like a possession unexplainable feelings, thoughtso, and something I've yet to discover... To be honest, I never wanted to be a writer. I was on my way to be a chef when something inside or above me to me to stop everything I was do in life and to just start writing about whatever. It's hard to explain, I have basically dropped a life that I believed I was supposed to lead and have taken on writing full time. I don't even know why, but it feels so right. It's not like I sit down and say, "okay, imma write one this topic," something greater than I "God" I believe commands me to do so when the moment is right. Idk, I stop ask why and how and just do it....
This has such amazing flow. Reading it was almost a dreamy experience for me. I honestly got lost in it,I don't read many things that make me feel that way. Very talented
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Wow, that's really amazing to hear that, I'm really glad. Thank you Brooke!
This reads pretty lyrical, more like a song, maybe rap lyrics than a mere written piece. Modern, refreshing language. An entertaining read.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
I would never try to rap, but thank you for that praise!
I just study literature from all its.. read moreI would never try to rap, but thank you for that praise!
I just study literature from all its forms and understand what sound, rhythm, and tone can do to the mind. I guess you can call it modern, but I like to call it a small piece of me.
Thank you for spending the time to read Vanessa, I'm glad you'd enjoyed it!
8 Years Ago
I did. Maybe you should try out writing lyrics but whatever floats your boat. I like your descriptio.. read moreI did. Maybe you should try out writing lyrics but whatever floats your boat. I like your description of it, though. You're welcome.
8 Years Ago
Maybe one day I will; I wouldn't shy away from the thought. I know song writers get paid big bucks �.. read moreMaybe one day I will; I wouldn't shy away from the thought. I know song writers get paid big bucks 🤑
8 Years Ago
Haha, maybe some, well I didn't when I did in the past yet is was more of a favor, then. I stay away.. read moreHaha, maybe some, well I didn't when I did in the past yet is was more of a favor, then. I stay away from writing lyrics now but continue to write poems (some with lyrical traits).
"My blues were never broken
Just bruises you took for misfortunes."
"The Hook to your Neverland- but that just didn't Pan out."
This poem reads so easily and beautifully, I am curious how natural this one came to you. I absolutely love this one!
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Not natural at all, more like supernatural! Almost like a possession unexplainable feelings, thought.. read moreNot natural at all, more like supernatural! Almost like a possession unexplainable feelings, thoughtso, and something I've yet to discover... To be honest, I never wanted to be a writer. I was on my way to be a chef when something inside or above me to me to stop everything I was do in life and to just start writing about whatever. It's hard to explain, I have basically dropped a life that I believed I was supposed to lead and have taken on writing full time. I don't even know why, but it feels so right. It's not like I sit down and say, "okay, imma write one this topic," something greater than I "God" I believe commands me to do so when the moment is right. Idk, I stop ask why and how and just do it....
I got goosebumps while reading this, and all I could picture was this spoken at a poetry night. This was beautiful.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
That's pretty sweet, I got goosebumps when I wrote it...
People keep on trying to get me to g.. read moreThat's pretty sweet, I got goosebumps when I wrote it...
People keep on trying to get me to go to poetry clubs and do spoken word, but I'm shy to the max!
Enjoyable poem.
"Lead my way
Outside the
Wrong and right."
These last three lines
say it all.
when loving that special one
is involved.
Well written and expressed.