Queen of Gotham

I was in possession of her,

But I was the one who was possessed.

The progressiveness regressed from within

-It was suisin.

It was her lips that made me quit.

Heart Barbarians.

Fighting to defend,

But the end result is

-DESTROY.

Forever to decay

Always displayed on a stage,

And the act was never the issue.

So sublime; yet, it's a beautiful issue.

Claps and tissues

Roses and bows

Crucify and crown

My mind that dwells on your

Swollen hell

While,

My Goddess taps into my

Shell of a heart.

Shark Week,

You came to devour on

Me.

Please love me.

I'm weak.

Reviews

[aLittlePain]

Intriguing, dirty, dark, control, captivating all words that came to mind upon reading this. I like this very much.

The flow is effortless and your words are carefully woven, paints a number of images in minds canvas.
Congratulations on a stunning work.

Ngā mihi maioha (warmest regards)
Rach x

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much for thinking so, and for spending the time to read as well as leaving me your thoughts, I highly appreciate that!

[Devious13]

i think that you are on the way however i feeel as though you are afraid to say what you really want to so to make it for the likes of the audience or those who will be in review of the pieces you tend to try to fix it proper but the enjoyment of poetry and what will set you apart is the personal relation that you have with your as an artist would say "" art"" give it raw and give it real and see what you get back but kudos and i think i will be olooking foward to some more pieces !@

[sinNsincerity]

hehe, thank you for that insight.

[Devious13]

I mean that in a great way , looking back maybe I said it wrong I mean to say i know that if you were super unfiltered and dident maybe watch or care of what the readers saw , or I may be completly wrong . but I think your super talented n i think it would be insane if you let go ... sorry if I delivered the message before the wrong t way but I love the pieces you have great wOrk,and no need to thank me I look up top the skillsof the talented writers on here..

[sinNsincerity]

But I'm not afraid of saying anything, I've been outspoken in very upfront in my old works. Now, I'm just having fun and playing with it. I get bored being repetitive, so I'm searching for new ways to write a poem and that never stops.My poetry is anything but proper and is my own. I'm not a person who would write to satisfy an audience of any type. I only write for one reason and people would never understand that reason, so reviews are the least of my concern.

[augustus]

A Most unusual approach and one which flowed nicely. Than you.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem. A feel of mystery and coldness in the words. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Coyote, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[Shannon]

This it written to feel like a rant. Like it's part of a play and a character is pacing the stage delivering the lines.
I am particularly taken with the first two lines.

[sinNsincerity]

Delusional like Hamlet?

[Shannon]

If only it were iambic pentameter. Lol
But sort of, yes.

[Raylene]

Unusual for the style you chose yet very beautiful in your write my dear

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much for thinking so Raylene, it was my pleasure!

[Raylene]

Anytime my dear

[Bear]

Critique: (It was suisin) seisin - meaning law?

Review: Powerful and expressive and I can see some of your expressions inspiring many poems "Heart Barbarians" gives me some ideas already. I love the ending and the imagery it triggers, blood in the water they come to devour us all. Great job, I give it five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[sinNsincerity]

No, Suisin. Like suicide.
I just try to through in the word sin in where ever in clever you know...
Heart Barbarians was inspired after I read the novel Waiting for the Barbarians. Pretty good read.
But thank you, I'm really stoked that you liked it Bear. I highly appreciate you spending the time for reading and leaving me your thoughts.

[Shabeeh Haider]

A beautiful poem. Very abstract in style and having multiple interpretations.
The closing lines are awesome.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much for thinking so Shabeeh, I highly appreciate that!

[Philip Muls]

It was her lips that made me quit. Powerful.

I also like the ending as it wraps up nicely what the essence is.

Well done.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it Philip.

[Ada]

I liked this
Especially the beginning

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you, I'm glad you did Ada!

[Elmarie]

Hi
Just wanted to say I liked your poem. Abstract ....... it had a lot of colorful word choice and it got the message across that we can be blinded by love and loose ourselves in it.

Blessings

El

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Elmarie, I highly appreciate that! I do my best in picking words that can paint several pictures, so that several meanings can be pulled out of it to different people including myself.
Thank you once again!