Fallen in Autumn

Sultry Mrs. Vixen;

My lustrous Vampiress Princess.

Lost sight of the lie,

Then exiled from

Your Eden heart.

Thine Oedipus eyes

Seduced the Exodus plight.

Never denying,

Providing the bottom line

Above your eyes.

No tears for my Icarus cries.

Magik and the Divine.

Your grace

Has summoned my mind

With your taste.

A drip of blood is all

That remained on your fangs.

Your pendulum waist

Unwinds my mental waste.

Desires and our fire contained

Within the rock portal;

Speaking with only cups and a string

-Aeneas and Dido

Unmortals

Unhonest

Untestimonious

My hell swells, swells, and swells;

Dwelling in your fornever

Ending wishing well

I upheld with dying stars.

Touch me too!

Author's Note

Voila

Reviews

[SleeplessVolcano]

Ahhh....those autumn (or fall) stumbles....do they quite compare to the ones in summer?

Delightful read, as always.

The upside is, as one star dies, it's black hole is beginning of a new one, right? (I am a poet, if I say so, it is true....lol)

[sinNsincerity]

Summer can be quite cold.
It's all a Russian Doll.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, such skill with words. Did Babylon really fall? :) very strong storytelling and I loved the overall feel of this piece. Izzy

[pia]

Then exiled from
Your Eden heart.
my favorite line.
also over all the poem was amazing

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I like your play with words here like unmortals, unhonest, untestimonious, and especially fornever. Very clever, making up new words! I love the entire poem, it's very eloquent and visually striking.

[Valentine]

Just being exiled did all of this too you? Valentine

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

Good lord! Reading your work is like a break from reality. I love the way you write.

[sinNsincerity]

That's all I wish to do, and I love sweeping people away from what the know.
Thank you Crystal, as do I!

[The Lazy Layman]

This is beautiful and contains great references. A poem can say so much more than face value when it alludes to other concepts. There is lovely imagery here too! Well done!

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you Mikaila, I love old literature, but I don't intend to make these analogies modern... I'm taking them and making them me.

[Warrior]

Very awesome read. I like how your writing flows together, to make me visualize everything that's going on. Many stories on here do that, and that's why most of the stories I read on here are good because you all are very talented and gifted, I visualized everything as I was reading it. Great writing. On to another topic. I have a website where I post my short stories, and blogs on. I also have ads on the website. I was wondering if you can go to my website, and click on any ad. you don't have to buy anything, I promise you won't get any viruses, all it is is google adsense on my website, and the more clicks on the ads, the more it helps grow my website. My website is bwlawson.com I appreciate it, that you would be taking part in helping my craft, business, product, and brand grow. Thank you!

[Pink Pastel]

Its nice very good with words^_^

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so Melissa.

[Pink Pastel]

Ur welcome ^-^

[Devious13]

nice way of expression , viola ! there is one very unique detaill however to this poem one word perhaps more like a name ,, i cant remember the past ,,,, oh geez it dont matter forgot the name but its very intising and made me want to read to the end regardlessz of the story line , but i like that and great job then again all your poetry is bomb !

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
I really appreciate that!

[Devious13]

your welcome !